讀完了吞雲雀的《色彩戰爭》。322Please respect copyright.PENANAl1KGM2OgW4
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簡單講一下我的想法。322Please respect copyright.PENANAus6RkFW1py
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首先是世界觀,本作融合了色彩與遊戲這兩項元素,光是第一個要素就顯得十分特別了,加上後者則更顯得獨樹一格,感覺挺有巧思的。322Please respect copyright.PENANAxZJFWGeT2w
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而在色彩相關的敘述和設定上,也能感覺十分紮實,有一定的厚度,我挺喜歡這種感覺的。322Please respect copyright.PENANAnDbweIysUC
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然後是角色。個人認為主要人物的描述顯得有些單薄,雖然能看見行文中加了表情、動作,但缺乏記憶點。322Please respect copyright.PENANAYM2VbffZbw
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除了在設定上,可以構思某個角色的特別之處、反差,也能多講述一點角色的背景、想法,以便凸顯人物。322Please respect copyright.PENANARebI28AWJf
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接著是行文。322Please respect copyright.PENANAPuM9UCn4e7
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本作的行文相當不錯,不過由於是第三人稱呈現,文字會顯得疏離。因此,可以多注意一下「主要視點」。322Please respect copyright.PENANAdV44cyUC7F
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設定某位角色(應該蠻多時候是安苒)作為中心,並且描述他內心的想法,並且觀察其他角色的行動,並推測他們各自的想法。322Please respect copyright.PENANAGB4dDXfiyF
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如此一來,也會比較拉進角色跟讀者的距離。322Please respect copyright.PENANA05tUTjkE74
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另外,雲雀擅長描寫場景中的「物件」,我覺得很不錯,而相形之下,背景有時便顯得模糊,或許可以針對這點再多加描述。322Please respect copyright.PENANAVtdeEKbzJI
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至於臺詞方面,感覺蠻活潑且充滿幽默的,這點我覺得挺好的。322Please respect copyright.PENANAtEEo86hih5
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大概是這樣。322Please respect copyright.PENANATjwxzj9bOF
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如果有興趣的話,歡迎各位朋友來讀讀看。322Please respect copyright.PENANAGoB7OgsHvK
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