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筆流暢舒服,看上去與故事匹配,讀得非常舒服。在這個故事塑造這個氛圍裏面,其實都沒有什麼好挑剔的了。554Please respect copyright.PENANAy9QIPhHncw
唯獨有點附加意見就是,既然作者已經非常擅於掌握節奏同寫到好溫馨細膩的感情,建議日後寫愛情小說時,在劇情或者世界觀裏面下點功夫,讓故事看上去「特別」一點。554Please respect copyright.PENANAyLq8HsfQxh
畢竟如今現實純愛的故事已經有點不待見,所以要吸引讀者 / 編輯眼球的話,就可能要在其他方面花點功夫哦。加油!8964 copyright protection550PENANAzTnBGMC0ex 維尼
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唯一可以挑刺就是對於「十年」這點算是較為牽強。如果寫長少少的話,可以是作者想17歲出書但失敗,然後再用十年參賽、投稿,成為一個知名作家,這樣就會扣題扣得好很多了。554Please respect copyright.PENANAizQC2I1sk5
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很不錯的玄幻作品。其實這種參賽作品,更是限制了一萬字內的比賽,要撰寫玄幻或異世界類的作品是困難的。554Please respect copyright.PENANA7f3cvA96Qa
首先很聰明先用現代及香港作背景,同時以茅山道法這香港人較熟悉的元素,變相不需要花費太多筆墨就能夠寫出玄幻元素。554Please respect copyright.PENANA0LlTyo3zgx
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以有限的字數建構完整的世界觀不容易,我認為作者在這方面是成功的。554Please respect copyright.PENANAdwNpJp7MXF
不過可以再留意內容的剪裁,精減一些與主線無關的敍述,如三位後人的感情線,可使情節更為緊湊。8964 copyright protection550PENANACBndiNEiHc 維尼
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缺點是劇情枝節太多,只是整體瑕不掩瑜,算是海選中其中一篇精品。8964 copyright protection550PENANAP9jptvQZEY 維尼
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1. 此等短篇字數有限,切忌得隴望蜀。不要野心太大創造過多角色,在一萬以內的短文之中,人多反而容易手腳亂。554Please respect copyright.PENANAf3e8RXTljL
2. 對於傳統茅山道術知識的引用需要注意一下,適量拋出會顯得淵博,但過多則會適得其反,有賣弄之感。554Please respect copyright.PENANAxbtuDf0uNY
3. 如第一點所言,三名小主角其實性格同存在感都不算突出,比較流於表面,尤其感情戲其實頗嫌累贅。下次設計劇情時要注意一下。8964 copyright protection550PENANAVqTRb8lAHK 維尼
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見證到他的成長也挺欣慰的8964 copyright protection550PENANA3ihLHF7dDZ 維尼
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到自己的休息室給8位候選區的參賽者排邀請順序哦!8964 copyright protection550PENANAwuZYoM7pas 維尼
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嗯,就是子鶱的七十•七萬•七十億。8964 copyright protection550PENANAXoOm8cED7C 維尼
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你也是打滿高分的。8964 copyright protection550PENANAUHG58cfSnk 維尼
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你會用來救他嗎?8964 copyright protection550PENANAvV9fN906Bn 維尼
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我覺得作者如果入選的話是紀言會比較符合他/她的風格554Please respect copyright.PENANAZoEtxcuSFI
我雖然能給到意見,但要入隊的話我還是想選一些我自覺能幫助更多的同學8964 copyright protection550PENANAdxwzl3x1PL 維尼
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你有甚麼想跟選你的參賽者說的嗎?8964 copyright protection550PENANAXVOkdohhGp 維尼
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多謝選擇我。554Please respect copyright.PENANALvzAcCwHZ5
希望我作為導師不會讓你們失望。8964 copyright protection550PENANAkfdu26zajo 維尼
我能否一個個說?8964 copyright protection550PENANAAE2m0jT0mh 維尼
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可以的8964 copyright protection550PENANAvrrRShopv4 維尼
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首先跟日匀 說吧。8964 copyright protection550PENANAN8lYs5yrfa 維尼
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你的文字功力甚至比我當年紮實。劇情弱項也跟我當年類同。554Please respect copyright.PENANA25E2RaXpJw
所以我很希望能幫助你寫武俠,加油!8964 copyright protection550PENANAfaLdRmu5HP 維尼
然後到過海巴士的洛羊。554Please respect copyright.PENANAQuzglf5Oe0
很驚訝你那麼高水準的會選擇我,希望我不會讓你失望!8964 copyright protection550PENANAXKapS07fAb 維尼
最後到逆時。554Please respect copyright.PENANAovCoy885Mj
嗯 ..... 你的文很對我腦波,所以。。。。多謝!!8964 copyright protection550PENANAOnsW03txg8 維尼
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你會先選那些首選你的參賽者嗎?8964 copyright protection550PENANAaHsrATC1de 維尼
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其實不會的554Please respect copyright.PENANAf2X2rzT6bW
但碰巧這次三個都極中我8964 copyright protection550PENANA4D2YaX986X 維尼
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明白。554Please respect copyright.PENANAxDhA3qSc3t
那你邀請順序已經想好了嗎?554Please respect copyright.PENANAVombLbuS02
有讓你猶豫的部分?8964 copyright protection550PENANA9l5pIiCTDf 維尼
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想好了8964 copyright protection550PENANAIiE9xLHrdw 維尼
1. #19 過海巴士 儀洛羊554Please respect copyright.PENANACU4dNlMLyB
2. #20 他的故事 日勻8964 copyright protection550PENANA7EDjmkxuGt 維尼
其他全棄權讓給另外兩位吧www8964 copyright protection550PENANABLAAXQ9ZAm 維尼
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竟然這樣!554Please respect copyright.PENANArvcGtjOlSp
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另外洛羊他們雖給到很高分,但我覺得他們有另外適合他們的554Please respect copyright.PENANAkAfindPKLu
應該不會跟我搶的wwwww8964 copyright protection550PENANA2AzPFpwz6R 維尼
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好的,一起來看看 東南的Flag……554Please respect copyright.PENANAE7GcYeIANY
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【楓成預備室】8964 copyright protection550PENANALDOQlnCLSU 維尼
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剛才完成了選擇門的部分8964 copyright protection550PENANABC5hjTIvKP 維尼
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是的554Please respect copyright.PENANAYhw3IqEUQk
真是艱難的一部份(汗8964 copyright protection550PENANAVFx5Fmzz3W 維尼
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你有感覺哪位參賽者進不了候選區554Please respect copyright.PENANACxFraVDT6k
很可惜的嗎?8964 copyright protection550PENANARwsghw06im 維尼
楓成8964 copyright protection550PENANAALEd4lURTG 維尼
嗯…554Please respect copyright.PENANA2JVJgQdD0z
真要說的話554Please respect copyright.PENANAzYWIWWZFIO
子鶱的七十•七萬•七十億是不錯的作品554Please respect copyright.PENANAR8rqBMkvML
只可惜名額有限8964 copyright protection550PENANAXVCDjiijD2 維尼
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那如果✊✊現在還可以用,你會用來救他嗎?8964 copyright protection550PENANA3VJxx4bclX 維尼
楓成8964 copyright protection550PENANAKUU1iTfCIF 維尼
也不會,哈哈554Please respect copyright.PENANADrgvjU0IDr
因為入選剩下來的選手也很出色8964 copyright protection550PENANALMWCvNHRCT 維尼
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是的。554Please respect copyright.PENANAfQSDDtJK4g
想問一下554Please respect copyright.PENANALUPLXMjDAK
日勻的作品——他的故事8964 copyright protection550PENANAPABxVHqCMV 維尼
你好像是給他打滿高分的,554Please respect copyright.PENANAcLhDw68zEW
但你好似沒有給他舉圈的吧?8964 copyright protection550PENANAGtxNd8Estx 維尼
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是的哈哈,大概是圓圈太有限了(眼神死8964 copyright protection550PENANAi8FsJHM6k2 維尼
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如果好像文楓落得三叉的下場,你會像紀言那樣出拳嗎?8964 copyright protection550PENANAR7MsuKEGLj 維尼
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這個,大概南師父不會給叉哈哈,所以我很放心554Please respect copyright.PENANAMZIvoYFBCi
所以應該也不會8964 copyright protection550PENANA8GGkfWJAVn 維尼
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你就算好了他們想法是不是ww8964 copyright protection550PENANAjWzn4inroU 維尼
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沒錯!554Please respect copyright.PENANAW6tsMF0NBd
你看洗版南師父就知道554Please respect copyright.PENANAa2RpqA4Qfk
古風武俠,他不會放過!8964 copyright protection550PENANAdrM1fBvS9W 維尼
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因為你不像另外兩位,已經定了第一名邀請的參賽者554Please respect copyright.PENANAMfyXPFizOB
你覺得是比較好、自在?554Please respect copyright.PENANA9J1EKtFzwx
還是比較擔心被搶人呢?8964 copyright protection550PENANA3DPoOpYnus 維尼
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也不會特別怕啦哈哈8964 copyright protection550PENANAqvfK2zo10k 維尼
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【紀言預備室】8964 copyright protection550PENANAb07C77tzFa 維尼
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剛完成了選擇門的部分554Please respect copyright.PENANAWpVNp8P1wy
有甚麼感想的嗎?8964 copyright protection550PENANA7M1TORnJux 維尼
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真的讓人緊張呢554Please respect copyright.PENANAxCRt2BxIOp
其實很多參賽者的實力相差真的不遠554Please respect copyright.PENANABrtHI4fOCP
在抉擇時真的讓人加倍為難8964 copyright protection550PENANARVJJ7KAfIm 維尼
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有沒有覺得可惜的參賽者?竟然進不了候選區這樣?8964 copyright protection550PENANAHFDVk7jrlm 維尼
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其實此去拾年我覺得是寫得不錯的554Please respect copyright.PENANANeZEoUj6Wz
可是類似的作品有點多554Please respect copyright.PENANAMrtcF1Xk1h
真的很可惜8964 copyright protection550PENANACG69SByLcB 維尼
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這是你當時沒有給出✊的原因嗎?8964 copyright protection550PENANAlA0riFdW7z 維尼
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此去拾年和十年陽光、董小姐都被我歸到同一類中554Please respect copyright.PENANAyi5Iff5PnM
嘛,他也寫得很好,但另外兩篇真的是更好8964 copyright protection550PENANAfKkUWQz13K 維尼
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明白。554Please respect copyright.PENANAMPgBufAhpF
那現在進入了給候選區參賽者排邀請順序的環節554Please respect copyright.PENANAoUZYFpkAG3
你有甚麼想法嗎?8964 copyright protection550PENANA3Y2Rxdk3G4 維尼
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說實在的554Please respect copyright.PENANAidr27UFjsr
我超級糾結554Please respect copyright.PENANAKEV221bxkY
尤其是(竟然)有那麼多參賽者選我,壓力倍增呢8964 copyright protection550PENANAidQMQYJPOX 維尼
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有想好要根據甚麼去排的?8964 copyright protection550PENANAniZ8Oia0oR 維尼
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本來是要跟分數排的,可是後來考慮到題材的問題,又再排了一次554Please respect copyright.PENANAmKPS5wiG9Y
如上所說,十年陽光和董小姐是在最高分之列554Please respect copyright.PENANAcRL6CgRlAt
可是他們的題材有點類近554Please respect copyright.PENANAQIpDWc6DVO
我想讓我的學員們能接觸多一點不同的類型,這樣聊起來才更有趣554Please respect copyright.PENANAFUgROQFCny
所以嘛,即使二人都是最高分,我還是只會選一個8964 copyright protection550PENANAto5xnMiUqJ 維尼
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說回來,你是參賽者們的最搶手首選導師,就最多人選你8964 copyright protection550PENANAEfz8RTh9L2 維尼
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當初沒想過這麼多人選我的哈哈554Please respect copyright.PENANAzB79mXw2AR
畢竟楓成是penana人氣王554Please respect copyright.PENANA2IVD4M04NT
東南也筆耕了十多年554Please respect copyright.PENANAiGgZ24qhzv
說到資歷和寫作的字數,可能我是最少的呢哈哈554Please respect copyright.PENANAT3IRTUnKOW
不過也感謝大家的愛戴8964 copyright protection550PENANAP2W393TYJn 維尼
我先說我的首選好了554Please respect copyright.PENANAK8Rt3DKKmB
(是甚麼呢???????)(自帶效果!)8964 copyright protection550PENANAERJV7MqsoK 維尼
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不是你說要早點睡的嗎!www8964 copyright protection550PENANAXPjeYe1ebz 維尼
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好了喇554Please respect copyright.PENANA0H15rsA7WA
第一位是十年陽光喇554Please respect copyright.PENANACrnK8FQ0lC
我要分享一下我的心路歷程XPXP8964 copyright protection550PENANAZfVa0eoneO 維尼
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可以的~8964 copyright protection550PENANAbFnz5vNJL5 維尼
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第二位就是成功獲得我一拳的獵巫!554Please respect copyright.PENANAYvGu9hlyv3
第三位其實糾結了超~~~~~~~~~~~久554Please respect copyright.PENANAmstWGQOa4O
是在輪候者和天使的惡作劇之間掙扎了好久8964 copyright protection550PENANAsEw1pNYjaz 維尼
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但輪候者的Blackative 很厲害,寫了兩篇不一樣的作品~8964 copyright protection550PENANABGocDrtzyD 維尼
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輪候者是非常成熟的作品,風格也已經定形了554Please respect copyright.PENANAlQShuoiKDs
時限內能寫兩篇也真的很厲害554Please respect copyright.PENANAAL5Ms0nDK5
不過時間小偷的話我就稍嫌有點負面了554Please respect copyright.PENANApZWYatpp2Y
寫作作為興趣,應該是先令自己開心,然後再看看其他的可能的554Please respect copyright.PENANAWHnUs8tsrb
至於天使的惡作劇,雖然分數上不及輪候者,但是他的文風很對我的腦波,我也覺得他有潛力554Please respect copyright.PENANAUXcpnuLzS1
所以第三位一直在他們之間糾結8964 copyright protection550PENANAyu39z3YsG3 維尼
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最後,你的選擇是……8964 copyright protection550PENANAL2FMyLlceJ 維尼
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就是⋯⋯554Please respect copyright.PENANA0r5QlIERnn
天使的惡作劇!554Please respect copyright.PENANAjMSfNXsS5N
我希望Blackative能被其他導師收入戰隊554Please respect copyright.PENANAMkFYViKMeu
他的實力是值得的554Please respect copyright.PENANA9RUvvNl49o
奈何只有三個位置554Please respect copyright.PENANAZK8VeJo79O
(嘛,規則也是我們三人定的,也沒辦法喇)8964 copyright protection550PENANANDMhhqIxJs 維尼
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好了……我們就先聽紀言的頭三順序,不然要天亮了8964 copyright protection550PENANAGmDJoL0k8y 維尼
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(邀請順序收集中……)8964 copyright protection550PENANAewZIvh6gfo 維尼
(節目組整理中……)8964 copyright protection550PENANAbUbXRZiEeu 維尼
開始送出組隊邀請!8964 copyright protection550PENANAgXJl5UmSpT 維尼
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【參賽者預備室】8964 copyright protection550PENANA5yhpfuN1XQ 維尼
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有些參賽者和導師們是兩情相悅的,554Please respect copyright.PENANAsRv8Gzke5N
最終修成正果,可喜可賀!8964 copyright protection550PENANAQjUCniYd6P 維尼
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恭喜你,成功加入東南/ 紀言 / 楓成戰隊!8964 copyright protection550PENANAZceWeHvhwZ 維尼
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:O 我以為係21號先有結果😂 btw thx8964 copyright protection550PENANAQfHK0NtpIo 維尼
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哇!真架?🥰8964 copyright protection550PENANAjNM96qWdrl 維尼
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收到了,感謝你這麼晚了還要通知我們這群選手8964 copyright protection550PENANApA6O85l6PK 維尼
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感激涕零!🥺🥺8964 copyright protection550PENANAbhrin2NWbn 維尼
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我入圍了?8964 copyright protection550PENANAqgULwh2lw4 維尼
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多謝你8964 copyright protection550PENANAArS85rjvpX 維尼
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終於等到消息😭😭8964 copyright protection550PENANAbTMoklZJbC 維尼
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而有些參賽者就要陷入天人交戰的選擇!554Please respect copyright.PENANADt5DNK0c6K
面對非首選導師的邀請,是要接受,還是……8964 copyright protection550PENANAQNkc48wYwH 維尼
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導師A誠邀你進入他的戰隊,請問你願意接受嗎?554Please respect copyright.PENANAGCt9yMIN1t
提提你,你首選係導師B8964 copyright protection550PENANAUFygGWO1Uc 維尼
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雖然冇被導師B選中有啲可惜,但我其實唔介意被分到邊一隊(搔頭8964 copyright protection550PENANAwElt1a69YD 維尼
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但導師B有冇講咩?8964 copyright protection550PENANAASuadtVPPL 維尼
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或者我解釋下先,個情況係:554Please respect copyright.PENANAmZlZqiDTyl
導師A對你嘅邀請順序高過導師B。554Please respect copyright.PENANAcAW2gTKvFc
如果你拒絕咗,有可能會收到導師B嘅邀請,554Please respect copyright.PENANAMbYkTuMLkX
但前提係:當時導師B戰隊未滿人。554Please respect copyright.PENANAqfZbH81ElK
如果導師B戰隊已經滿人,但你又拒絕咗導師A,554Please respect copyright.PENANAWWavBwV80T
你就只可以參與復活賽,睇下仲有冇機會入導師B戰隊。8964 copyright protection550PENANAummgjAlTgR 維尼
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咁複雜既ODO?!554Please respect copyright.PENANAUkT0WBxGoT
喊出嚟,都好賭博喎(つД`)8964 copyright protection550PENANANthCwpjAU8 維尼
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依個我最遲可以幾時答你?8964 copyright protection550PENANAmJR44NYBgv 維尼
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可能……盡快?8964 copyright protection550PENANAWlBogVAHlw 維尼
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我今晚墊高枕頭諗諗,聽日覆你唔好意思(つД`)8964 copyright protection550PENANA3V4iUsFpe9 維尼
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咁就加入導師A嘅戰隊554Please respect copyright.PENANAGOY4VG1jod
我估,咁姐係佢幾欣賞我554Please respect copyright.PENANAU7Mju1jp2s
掛8964 copyright protection550PENANAb1td8ilwr1 維尼
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我決定好了(超快554Please respect copyright.PENANApXztXQzNGG
我都係入導師A隊554Please respect copyright.PENANAvZzyl9U6Rg
唔太敢賭(つД`)8964 copyright protection550PENANAvgXyPbIFvt 維尼
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【鏡頭關上後】8964 copyright protection550PENANAMdgRbaztT5 維尼
東南8964 copyright protection550PENANAiLUm1gEHzD 維尼
我有少少寄語卑Blackative,我不如Pm你?8964 copyright protection550PENANAWs3RHjUYDA 維尼
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好8964 copyright protection550PENANA5Kw2Pv8Zqr 維尼
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首先要講一句好遺憾你入唔到戰隊賽。554Please respect copyright.PENANAfTR87ggn2q
你兩篇文喺我眼中都係本次比賽裏面的精品,但我選擇戰隊成員時,實力雖然係其中一個考慮因素,但另外更多係會考慮成員風格同自己夾唔夾,同埋每位成員的潛力等等因素。554Please respect copyright.PENANAkTMfNMD458
你卑我感覺係一個已經相當成熟,好有自己一套嘅作者,無論係時間小偷定係豬果篇我覺得都發揮得唔錯,我讀時都頗有眼前一亮的感覺。554Please respect copyright.PENANArJT2Lrdvup
但奈何戰隊賽名額有限,我揀的三位亦係我認為最適合我戰隊的成員,所以就只能忍痛無向你拋出橄欖枝,我相信其餘兩位導師應該都同我一樣,對你落選係感到遺憾的。554Please respect copyright.PENANAhTRFEYZrgk
我希望你唔好因為呢個結果就感到氣餒,希望你能夠堅持同繼續寫落去。如果你參加復活賽的話,我亦會非常期待你復活賽的表現,加油!8964 copyright protection550PENANALBLZfhrldX 維尼
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之後還會有很多寫作分享跟幕後花絮讓你看,不要錯過囉!8964 copyright protection550PENANAGubqOXYmpV 維尼
參賽者們,8964 copyright protection550PENANAOOnj7oAI0G 維尼
第二階段還有三十二天就要結束了!8964 copyright protection550PENANAwKpWvUslHI 維尼
注意時間哦!8964 copyright protection550PENANASvoTAetAEQ 維尼
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