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筆流暢舒服,看上去與故事匹配,讀得非常舒服。在這個故事塑造這個氛圍裏面,其實都沒有什麼好挑剔的了。553Please respect copyright.PENANAFvdDLW6XxK
唯獨有點附加意見就是,既然作者已經非常擅於掌握節奏同寫到好溫馨細膩的感情,建議日後寫愛情小說時,在劇情或者世界觀裏面下點功夫,讓故事看上去「特別」一點。553Please respect copyright.PENANADKnprnlpJv
畢竟如今現實純愛的故事已經有點不待見,所以要吸引讀者 / 編輯眼球的話,就可能要在其他方面花點功夫哦。加油!8964 copyright protection549PENANAMRBxOk9FW7 維尼
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唯一可以挑刺就是對於「十年」這點算是較為牽強。如果寫長少少的話,可以是作者想17歲出書但失敗,然後再用十年參賽、投稿,成為一個知名作家,這樣就會扣題扣得好很多了。553Please respect copyright.PENANAq1rMrUNSnr
其實這一篇也可以寫長,變成一部5、6萬的中短篇小說,我覺得也挺有潛質的。8964 copyright protection549PENANAJLgPwQuNKl 維尼
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一起來迎接最後一位參賽者~553Please respect copyright.PENANAFLpWRkBXrr
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很不錯的玄幻作品。其實這種參賽作品,更是限制了一萬字內的比賽,要撰寫玄幻或異世界類的作品是困難的。553Please respect copyright.PENANAyiXFwvt9MG
首先很聰明先用現代及香港作背景,同時以茅山道法這香港人較熟悉的元素,變相不需要花費太多筆墨就能夠寫出玄幻元素。553Please respect copyright.PENANAOvXbyTZKld
整體從文筆、劇情、橋段等等實屬不俗。553Please respect copyright.PENANAt7e7xNM6ZH
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為了楓成而入寫作坑的人……莫名熱血啊!553Please respect copyright.PENANAMmVPQ0g25Q
以有限的字數建構完整的世界觀不容易,我認為作者在這方面是成功的。553Please respect copyright.PENANAKfBz3DGx60
不過可以再留意內容的剪裁,精減一些與主線無關的敍述,如三位後人的感情線,可使情節更為緊湊。8964 copyright protection549PENANANZPrUOnH26 維尼
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缺點是劇情枝節太多,只是整體瑕不掩瑜,算是海選中其中一篇精品。8964 copyright protection549PENANAKzRHhFZ98c 維尼
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1. 此等短篇字數有限,切忌得隴望蜀。不要野心太大創造過多角色,在一萬以內的短文之中,人多反而容易手腳亂。553Please respect copyright.PENANAF01bCOkBLO
2. 對於傳統茅山道術知識的引用需要注意一下,適量拋出會顯得淵博,但過多則會適得其反,有賣弄之感。553Please respect copyright.PENANApS0S6IboLp
3. 如第一點所言,三名小主角其實性格同存在感都不算突出,比較流於表面,尤其感情戲其實頗嫌累贅。下次設計劇情時要注意一下。8964 copyright protection549PENANAMta0dqszL0 維尼
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這個作者是我認識的人呢553Please respect copyright.PENANAM6pt86r4IB
見證到他的成長也挺欣慰的8964 copyright protection549PENANAGw4R7EPkZn 維尼
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東南老人家模式啟動了8964 copyright protection549PENANA0wYGitv8wV 維尼
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郁郁如煙消於天553Please respect copyright.PENANAod9LjVJHAE
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Blackative553Please respect copyright.PENANAcn8LrHl2ag
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文楓8964 copyright protection549PENANA2CoZook5gm 維尼
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接下來請三位退場553Please respect copyright.PENANANw6UePw68x
到自己的休息室給8位候選區的參賽者排邀請順序哦!8964 copyright protection549PENANA4F4OuUczy0 維尼
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我覺得下一站天后是很可惜的8964 copyright protection549PENANA8Id9nbUyZE 維尼
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嗯,就是子鶱的七十•七萬•七十億。8964 copyright protection549PENANA9Qmv4jrMgF 維尼
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你也是打滿高分的。8964 copyright protection549PENANAtIfBJS4LE8 維尼
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嗯8964 copyright protection549PENANAzw0hFRH5Gg 維尼
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如果當初沒有用到✊✊的機會553Please respect copyright.PENANAd5uj9s92We
你會用來救他嗎?8964 copyright protection549PENANAXmmCUniyP8 維尼
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應該也不會。因為拳拳是直接順序第一名的選項553Please respect copyright.PENANAlDwIqh4N8S
我覺得作者如果入選的話是紀言會比較符合他/她的風格553Please respect copyright.PENANAUQR2zyckHT
我雖然能給到意見,但要入隊的話我還是想選一些我自覺能幫助更多的同學8964 copyright protection549PENANA3uOKGpUC3i 維尼
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你有甚麼想跟選你的參賽者說的嗎?8964 copyright protection549PENANACMHAgHVNRA 維尼
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多謝選擇我。553Please respect copyright.PENANAxe8rvv6gw2
希望我作為導師不會讓你們失望。8964 copyright protection549PENANATaZlum0P2e 維尼
我能否一個個說?8964 copyright protection549PENANAfRqhNORFf1 維尼
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可以的8964 copyright protection549PENANAcF3CYD70ae 維尼
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首先跟日匀 說吧。8964 copyright protection549PENANAZQo6dfUNsh 維尼
其實見到你的文章,我感覺見到一個強化版的「當年自己」。553Please respect copyright.PENANAyjXTaQdnVk
你的文字功力甚至比我當年紮實。劇情弱項也跟我當年類同。553Please respect copyright.PENANA46CFNKw9B8
所以我很希望能幫助你寫武俠,加油!8964 copyright protection549PENANAiNzQdhfB7W 維尼
然後到過海巴士的洛羊。553Please respect copyright.PENANAZW3FJvUMg5
很驚訝你那麼高水準的會選擇我,希望我不會讓你失望!8964 copyright protection549PENANAYox3M3JazW 維尼
最後到逆時。553Please respect copyright.PENANA6GvyHRN7V3
嗯 ..... 你的文很對我腦波,所以。。。。多謝!!8964 copyright protection549PENANA1HcWnO8xre 維尼
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你會先選那些首選你的參賽者嗎?8964 copyright protection549PENANAfDq1PplDGW 維尼
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其實不會的553Please respect copyright.PENANACdEVMNOXt9
但碰巧這次三個都極中我8964 copyright protection549PENANAKjhnBNovPa 維尼
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明白。553Please respect copyright.PENANA4w71uri24t
那你邀請順序已經想好了嗎?553Please respect copyright.PENANAniESTLn3YI
有讓你猶豫的部分?8964 copyright protection549PENANA4eEF6QWV6O 維尼
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想好了8964 copyright protection549PENANAsZjJRN69ks 維尼
1. #19 過海巴士 儀洛羊553Please respect copyright.PENANAokZilTEkHk
2. #20 他的故事 日勻8964 copyright protection549PENANAKh3A0CuEvR 維尼
其他全棄權讓給另外兩位吧www8964 copyright protection549PENANAvEWBa3QlBe 維尼
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竟然這樣!553Please respect copyright.PENANAmwfgznyzdl
你就不怕另外兩位跟你搶嗎?553Please respect copyright.PENANAhB0fRdNFZP
這樣你最糟可能只有一人進隊哦!8964 copyright protection549PENANAl0GBydO9hN 維尼
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我覺得他們一定不會搶日匀的。553Please respect copyright.PENANAFX6yKcPjFW
另外洛羊他們雖給到很高分,但我覺得他們有另外適合他們的553Please respect copyright.PENANAGpQ0gBWrw4
應該不會跟我搶的wwwww8964 copyright protection549PENANABzWBCmeqkZ 維尼
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好的,一起來看看 東南的Flag……553Please respect copyright.PENANAsXs3kKi5yU
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求不要搶553Please respect copyright.PENANAE1apfWK6NR
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【楓成預備室】8964 copyright protection549PENANAJJ5QrbveiL 維尼
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剛才完成了選擇門的部分8964 copyright protection549PENANALtTUoVQXWv 維尼
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是的553Please respect copyright.PENANApolLCxTiJb
真是艱難的一部份(汗8964 copyright protection549PENANAPlcUE1ICXz 維尼
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你有感覺哪位參賽者進不了候選區553Please respect copyright.PENANAMAruJ4Fq8W
很可惜的嗎?8964 copyright protection549PENANAzuFL7Y3Nwo 維尼
楓成8964 copyright protection549PENANAqfA4cUShTp 維尼
嗯…553Please respect copyright.PENANAcEJ0W6PAc5
真要說的話553Please respect copyright.PENANAwqy4X7xk3v
子鶱的七十•七萬•七十億是不錯的作品553Please respect copyright.PENANAnKfSKqkacN
只可惜名額有限8964 copyright protection549PENANAxxYD1UqReM 維尼
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那如果✊✊現在還可以用,你會用來救他嗎?8964 copyright protection549PENANAmOfalohVMd 維尼
楓成8964 copyright protection549PENANAciGWlUnQ0m 維尼
也不會,哈哈553Please respect copyright.PENANAd4ldmOOq1p
因為入選剩下來的選手也很出色8964 copyright protection549PENANAeS3UhffNZi 維尼
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是的。553Please respect copyright.PENANANc88zg7zda
想問一下553Please respect copyright.PENANAQaEEWLYwYc
日勻的作品——他的故事8964 copyright protection549PENANAIdNfdHAxjx 維尼
你好像是給他打滿高分的,553Please respect copyright.PENANARJEQsMmkQd
但你好似沒有給他舉圈的吧?8964 copyright protection549PENANAUQXwwjFBnS 維尼
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是的哈哈,大概是圓圈太有限了(眼神死8964 copyright protection549PENANAWy3NM7cMWw 維尼
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如果好像文楓落得三叉的下場,你會像紀言那樣出拳嗎?8964 copyright protection549PENANAAPTUwpdgvw 維尼
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這個,大概南師父不會給叉哈哈,所以我很放心553Please respect copyright.PENANAsuDt0rVmaB
所以應該也不會8964 copyright protection549PENANAaDqMRrYgpQ 維尼
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你就算好了他們想法是不是ww8964 copyright protection549PENANAXRIXyZ4qIJ 維尼
楓成8964 copyright protection549PENANAL59YbMvq83 維尼
沒錯!553Please respect copyright.PENANAMmimI9see5
你看洗版南師父就知道553Please respect copyright.PENANAzlYh894ZrK
古風武俠,他不會放過!8964 copyright protection549PENANAIGIms9InoJ 維尼
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因為你不像另外兩位,已經定了第一名邀請的參賽者553Please respect copyright.PENANAMVdbY2itqB
你覺得是比較好、自在?553Please respect copyright.PENANAp4SzSgLlvd
還是比較擔心被搶人呢?8964 copyright protection549PENANAW5Lfaxp9b3 維尼
楓成8964 copyright protection549PENANAS7Ebg9ae6M 維尼
也不會特別怕啦哈哈8964 copyright protection549PENANAek2ENHOhhU 維尼
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【紀言預備室】8964 copyright protection549PENANAx8yLYas3gR 維尼
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剛完成了選擇門的部分553Please respect copyright.PENANAc5nTKh27yj
有甚麼感想的嗎?8964 copyright protection549PENANApmbVo9izCv 維尼
紀言8964 copyright protection549PENANAqshRCG6nVc 維尼
真的讓人緊張呢553Please respect copyright.PENANArlUoJxtrsw
其實很多參賽者的實力相差真的不遠553Please respect copyright.PENANAr2dN8N0STn
在抉擇時真的讓人加倍為難8964 copyright protection549PENANAyhraRzAeAe 維尼
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有沒有覺得可惜的參賽者?竟然進不了候選區這樣?8964 copyright protection549PENANADyRWmK2Hee 維尼
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其實此去拾年我覺得是寫得不錯的553Please respect copyright.PENANAfps0ZvjrkV
可是類似的作品有點多553Please respect copyright.PENANAQ4Sa4rT8zM
真的很可惜8964 copyright protection549PENANAHT3PZwvkKP 維尼
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這是你當時沒有給出✊的原因嗎?8964 copyright protection549PENANAdS6ZaXGFmW 維尼
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此去拾年和十年陽光、董小姐都被我歸到同一類中553Please respect copyright.PENANAqGEX5E8dHW
嘛,他也寫得很好,但另外兩篇真的是更好8964 copyright protection549PENANAYekSZ7RZCs 維尼
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明白。553Please respect copyright.PENANASk9jGP6ziN
那現在進入了給候選區參賽者排邀請順序的環節553Please respect copyright.PENANAhi19wVAJgP
你有甚麼想法嗎?8964 copyright protection549PENANAiPIyOBvalR 維尼
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說實在的553Please respect copyright.PENANAdaPdXXW2eG
我超級糾結553Please respect copyright.PENANAMxlCIgs2zv
尤其是(竟然)有那麼多參賽者選我,壓力倍增呢8964 copyright protection549PENANAlnncXC2ttO 維尼
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有想好要根據甚麼去排的?8964 copyright protection549PENANA12LjJGrb3H 維尼
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本來是要跟分數排的,可是後來考慮到題材的問題,又再排了一次553Please respect copyright.PENANAz9VhpRcr2r
如上所說,十年陽光和董小姐是在最高分之列553Please respect copyright.PENANAmxrNElx2uR
可是他們的題材有點類近553Please respect copyright.PENANA1RAObLstP1
我想讓我的學員們能接觸多一點不同的類型,這樣聊起來才更有趣553Please respect copyright.PENANAqQnA8lZHVl
所以嘛,即使二人都是最高分,我還是只會選一個8964 copyright protection549PENANAySACfLoT5s 維尼
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說回來,你是參賽者們的最搶手首選導師,就最多人選你8964 copyright protection549PENANApzgxWpZsOw 維尼
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當初沒想過這麼多人選我的哈哈553Please respect copyright.PENANAFrbybarRxU
畢竟楓成是penana人氣王553Please respect copyright.PENANAMAxMzb4aeM
東南也筆耕了十多年553Please respect copyright.PENANAG2KCuQk0jK
說到資歷和寫作的字數,可能我是最少的呢哈哈553Please respect copyright.PENANAF4dGh14jon
不過也感謝大家的愛戴8964 copyright protection549PENANAoeQhGeqJSX 維尼
我先說我的首選好了553Please respect copyright.PENANAr6cxvwbP2r
(是甚麼呢???????)(自帶效果!)8964 copyright protection549PENANAC3TphmUntd 維尼
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不是你說要早點睡的嗎!www8964 copyright protection549PENANAZQel2gItEw 維尼
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好了喇553Please respect copyright.PENANAWEaxIhgeSw
第一位是十年陽光喇553Please respect copyright.PENANAXYrPeCL11J
我要分享一下我的心路歷程XPXP8964 copyright protection549PENANA2K05kMfqsm 維尼
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可以的~8964 copyright protection549PENANAK6IB74xt7X 維尼
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第二位就是成功獲得我一拳的獵巫!553Please respect copyright.PENANAORJQw6fojT
第三位其實糾結了超~~~~~~~~~~~久553Please respect copyright.PENANARojdYL0NqF
是在輪候者和天使的惡作劇之間掙扎了好久8964 copyright protection549PENANAEMtRxrqBxS 維尼
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但輪候者的Blackative 很厲害,寫了兩篇不一樣的作品~8964 copyright protection549PENANAA7qYiY6n7e 維尼
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輪候者是非常成熟的作品,風格也已經定形了553Please respect copyright.PENANAaeb9WleZEd
時限內能寫兩篇也真的很厲害553Please respect copyright.PENANATP5gTo2fW0
不過時間小偷的話我就稍嫌有點負面了553Please respect copyright.PENANAjRzXczTI8J
寫作作為興趣,應該是先令自己開心,然後再看看其他的可能的553Please respect copyright.PENANAIJqr5Wrc3Z
至於天使的惡作劇,雖然分數上不及輪候者,但是他的文風很對我的腦波,我也覺得他有潛力553Please respect copyright.PENANAFoHk4BZGnv
所以第三位一直在他們之間糾結8964 copyright protection549PENANABSyG2Znw40 維尼
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最後,你的選擇是……8964 copyright protection549PENANAq9cLRiiemn 維尼
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就是⋯⋯553Please respect copyright.PENANAwJYLS5tv7y
天使的惡作劇!553Please respect copyright.PENANAZkaMBlryp3
我希望Blackative能被其他導師收入戰隊553Please respect copyright.PENANAivbdfsG3SC
他的實力是值得的553Please respect copyright.PENANAKwl8GY1ZOg
奈何只有三個位置553Please respect copyright.PENANApwgu7scjnH
(嘛,規則也是我們三人定的,也沒辦法喇)8964 copyright protection549PENANAqdpCGROgEX 維尼
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好了……我們就先聽紀言的頭三順序,不然要天亮了8964 copyright protection549PENANAa8LdXbEfpo 維尼
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謝謝紀言😂8964 copyright protection549PENANAjWyIvABXcL 維尼
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(邀請順序收集中……)8964 copyright protection549PENANANe7fxH0NOA 維尼
(節目組整理中……)8964 copyright protection549PENANATy1jrUiCg1 維尼
開始送出組隊邀請!8964 copyright protection549PENANA79SlVzSnJq 維尼
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【參賽者預備室】8964 copyright protection549PENANA3l2i9OsGoS 維尼
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有些參賽者和導師們是兩情相悅的,553Please respect copyright.PENANAPYSUtWLxbU
最終修成正果,可喜可賀!8964 copyright protection549PENANACDmR7bqe2e 維尼
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恭喜你,成功加入東南/ 紀言 / 楓成戰隊!8964 copyright protection549PENANALZ5e7g4LZk 維尼
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:O 我以為係21號先有結果😂 btw thx8964 copyright protection549PENANAKkg69QPgrt 維尼
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哇!真架?🥰8964 copyright protection549PENANA4QYs45BhG2 維尼
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收到了,感謝你這麼晚了還要通知我們這群選手8964 copyright protection549PENANAWdxJubGM5E 維尼
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感激涕零!🥺🥺8964 copyright protection549PENANA9lWZr3SSIe 維尼
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我入圍了?8964 copyright protection549PENANAsF3rZNNXHG 維尼
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多謝你8964 copyright protection549PENANAbu7KWKEvwo 維尼
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終於等到消息😭😭8964 copyright protection549PENANAD9ZV3RK0Th 維尼
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而有些參賽者就要陷入天人交戰的選擇!553Please respect copyright.PENANAeYBLnbJAcZ
面對非首選導師的邀請,是要接受,還是……8964 copyright protection549PENANA0K0TZRoINi 維尼
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導師A誠邀你進入他的戰隊,請問你願意接受嗎?553Please respect copyright.PENANAlH7ATKUl1K
提提你,你首選係導師B8964 copyright protection549PENANAr1EwHQLvaV 維尼
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雖然冇被導師B選中有啲可惜,但我其實唔介意被分到邊一隊(搔頭8964 copyright protection549PENANAQ0tKBQs4HB 維尼
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但導師B有冇講咩?8964 copyright protection549PENANAbkS6rruEw5 維尼
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或者我解釋下先,個情況係:553Please respect copyright.PENANAdzHiVcciLD
導師A對你嘅邀請順序高過導師B。553Please respect copyright.PENANAKif5OSG9vx
如果你拒絕咗,有可能會收到導師B嘅邀請,553Please respect copyright.PENANAtLRCYOXyD7
但前提係:當時導師B戰隊未滿人。553Please respect copyright.PENANA7Nyowkguzk
如果導師B戰隊已經滿人,但你又拒絕咗導師A,553Please respect copyright.PENANA77MesW0Agp
你就只可以參與復活賽,睇下仲有冇機會入導師B戰隊。8964 copyright protection549PENANApkYzi2LghK 維尼
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咁複雜既ODO?!553Please respect copyright.PENANAQGDEqZF7P1
喊出嚟,都好賭博喎(つД`)8964 copyright protection549PENANAmC2MlKGyux 維尼
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依個我最遲可以幾時答你?8964 copyright protection549PENANA4zpj2i6N6v 維尼
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可能……盡快?8964 copyright protection549PENANAdtzjtYAc7U 維尼
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我今晚墊高枕頭諗諗,聽日覆你唔好意思(つД`)8964 copyright protection549PENANAeNymPiXfoV 維尼
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咁就加入導師A嘅戰隊553Please respect copyright.PENANAt33P1wgqk1
我估,咁姐係佢幾欣賞我553Please respect copyright.PENANAEqjv97Zzo0
掛8964 copyright protection549PENANA47xr6efexL 維尼
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我決定好了(超快553Please respect copyright.PENANAX20HzS1pVI
我都係入導師A隊553Please respect copyright.PENANAT9D2ClwqPL
唔太敢賭(つД`)8964 copyright protection549PENANA9NQ3bUf3My 維尼
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【鏡頭關上後】8964 copyright protection549PENANAXDJt8vo05o 維尼
東南8964 copyright protection549PENANAudooZg5UQi 維尼
我有少少寄語卑Blackative,我不如Pm你?8964 copyright protection549PENANAEFlvXVRv8V 維尼
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好8964 copyright protection549PENANA2JiN1vjbp4 維尼
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首先要講一句好遺憾你入唔到戰隊賽。553Please respect copyright.PENANALW6ZLSPjwv
你兩篇文喺我眼中都係本次比賽裏面的精品,但我選擇戰隊成員時,實力雖然係其中一個考慮因素,但另外更多係會考慮成員風格同自己夾唔夾,同埋每位成員的潛力等等因素。553Please respect copyright.PENANAjkB9hDWDdI
你卑我感覺係一個已經相當成熟,好有自己一套嘅作者,無論係時間小偷定係豬果篇我覺得都發揮得唔錯,我讀時都頗有眼前一亮的感覺。553Please respect copyright.PENANAUM5mDt0GhC
但奈何戰隊賽名額有限,我揀的三位亦係我認為最適合我戰隊的成員,所以就只能忍痛無向你拋出橄欖枝,我相信其餘兩位導師應該都同我一樣,對你落選係感到遺憾的。553Please respect copyright.PENANAc6Cstjccpv
我希望你唔好因為呢個結果就感到氣餒,希望你能夠堅持同繼續寫落去。如果你參加復活賽的話,我亦會非常期待你復活賽的表現,加油!8964 copyright protection549PENANA6V1ycBewed 維尼
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多謝收看!8964 copyright protection549PENANAy5GumiQESE 維尼
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【第二階段:戰隊/復活賽】「太歲兵團 X 萌動學生小說集2021」寫作營8964 copyright protection549PENANAfK7zLmDf83 維尼
之後還會有很多寫作分享跟幕後花絮讓你看,不要錯過囉!8964 copyright protection549PENANADmsVgLhWB4 維尼
參賽者們,8964 copyright protection549PENANAJ67wiXAnBz 維尼
第二階段還有三十二天就要結束了!8964 copyright protection549PENANAlaJ0jlEFQg 維尼
注意時間哦!8964 copyright protection549PENANA1UlwdEEZjn 維尼
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