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就是說很難!小霧很不懂寫《青蘋果》!寫得錯還請見諒!8964 copyright protection532PENANAQ0bI2EoK6O 維尼
解釋一下吧:雨紛紛飄落,墜在玉砌時雨唱出呢喃之語(試用典范仲淹《御街行》:紛紛墜葉飄香砌,他本指墜葉,這裏偏指墜雨),顆顆雨水融泥,是一場簾外雨,使得碧綠繁茂(綠縛)花香久立(伫)面雨而倦,晏晏輕雨輕彈,迎接(迓)雨之葉讓其流在葉紋上,似遊川水,重些難分葉上的是朝露還是瓊雨,過了美麗(靡)芳雨在凡間的留戀,方知彩虹綻放,晴天還在。8964 copyright protection532PENANAvgBhqH7L6V 維尼
*顆粤語是同火音,為(foe2),仄聲,不要懷疑XD8964 copyright protection532PENANAGmcODOpNES 維尼
這次忍不住用了點粤語押韻,國語應是勉強押韻吧!8964 copyright protection532PENANAmFj8TWjAzn 維尼
想來想去,還是寫了兩篇,但想了很久還是分不清那篇是差中較好的,又不想删了它,便放在下XD8964 copyright protection532PENANAgwsAWdnerM 維尼
*非參挑作品,但亦歡迎評語!(真的很差!)8964 copyright protection532PENANAgIwiulS4cm 維尼
《青平樂.霧》8964 copyright protection532PENANAMJ0Q2Sn26D 維尼
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解釋一下:斜陽照下一片,濕霧鋪掩萬物,冥迷的淡霧如煙,分隔了枝頭語燕(化用典:陳亮《水龍吟》:淡煙閣雨),煙霧散了,牠們便能相見,弄晴霏霧似在編絲(用典:周邦彥《應天長》:霏霧弄晴),晏晏地半遮潔白(皞)池塘,舞在如絲絹(縐)的霧中之飛蝶,分不清路,蝶衣沾了花甜。8964 copyright protection532PENANAqVMMtvYlZ7 維尼
若非是挑戰,也應不會再吃這個《青蘋果》…寫得不好還請見諒!8964 copyright protection532PENANA51Urdz6dIr 維尼
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