首先,在此說聲感謝。
【第6期創作挑戰】歷時1年才將其完成評比。
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原先應該在今年初完成最終結語。
但在這期間,我遇到了職場上必須離開台灣本島一段很長的時間。
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身邊除了沒有電腦用,又外加大寶處於一歲難照顧的時期,同時間又懷了二寶。
生活的考驗不斷地消彌我對於創作的熱誠,與占據了大多數的空閒。
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我必須說。
很遺憾的有些人在一年後已經離開了蕉園。
他(她)們沒能等待到這一次的落幕。
也很可惜。
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最後,我將再次感謝你們願意耐心等待這場落幕儀式。
-----Lonely Fish 2024.11.06
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恭喜第六期的創作挑戰榮獲2023創作挑戰第二名的殊榮
這次的費時長達一年的時間來完成評比。
這裡我可以大膽的跟各位報告,每一篇作品少說都讀過兩次以上,並且全部都留下語評。
240篇文筆不一的文章,我必須老實說「讀起來,真的燒腦的一蹋糊塗。」
但創作理念熱誠還在,這些都不是問題。
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以上廢話結束。
接著,我們準備公布這次的成績,並在後面留下一點這個創作挑戰的心得。
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由於篇幅眾多。(小說類190篇,新詩類44篇,其他6篇。)
我採取小說正取前20篇,以我個人主觀挑選在故事劇情、用字、人物刻劃都能拿上檯面。
並且讓人願意反覆閱讀的好作品。
我會「盡量」挑選字數符合在1500字的作品。
另外,在新詩的部分,由於主題應當以新詩作為框架。
但考量到部分樂府詩、古詩這類的作品,故此一併用單純「詩」的角度去作為出發點,進行評選。
另外,額外兩個獨力拉出來的獎項,分別是【最佳電腦繪畫獎】及【最佳創作金曲獎】,後續會多作說明。
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小說類
【1】凶讀 $5000
▶#20 #21 夏日湖畔(上+下) #104 夏日湖畔(番外)香氣
▶已連續三篇故事銜接的方式,引領讀者深入,不管在用字上,人物刻劃都非常的好。
▶語評
「剪不斷,理還亂,是離愁。別是一般滋味在心頭。」李煜一句思念妻子的思緒,在第一章的開局,讓人無限醞釀著,那多麼曾經的美好。456Please respect copyright.PENANA26D2G2NYzy
接續則是父親與孩兒間,多年來已未溫存的親情。
畫面是那麼地美不勝收---456Please respect copyright.PENANAQvyewEvl9b
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又一刻,轉折接踵而來。456Please respect copyright.PENANAUDkxiNMWTv
一陣猛咳,替換的是埋下了這段故事另一處伏筆。456Please respect copyright.PENANANcqautphEl
一個故事之內容精采萬分,之所以讓人看了血脈噴張,捨不得放下,就是因為其中的不平凡。456Please respect copyright.PENANA6wRHdVOMpO
而這篇在下章就是如此。456Please respect copyright.PENANAw6zXwuvjbK
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林佑堂的變故,是突來的喪屍系列。456Please respect copyright.PENANAJwNwQukDzG
估計讀者心到此處,仍處在數度混亂之中,這便也是作者凶讀所達成的目的。456Please respect copyright.PENANASwRjXVGR8f
耐人尋味的親情,卻轉折為末日的延續,更讓人有敲碗再看下去續篇的打算。456Please respect copyright.PENANA7M4MfWuln5
而在那新聞快訊後,簡潔地收尾結束,更把這篇有力的畫下句點。456Please respect copyright.PENANAhfF0D0q9vO
是否疫情將緩和停滯,這我們無從得知。456Please respect copyright.PENANAtXDPg0pb8Y
但唯一明白的卻是,那份恐懼感已然存於你內心深處,餘音繞梁三日不絕。456Please respect copyright.PENANAb5VF04cRZE
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在104章的番外篇延續了,讀者再次想要的畫面,凶讀更是樂善好施地將畫面全數帶給讀者,簡直令人幸福得太過不要。456Please respect copyright.PENANA0ecqmmd1wo
「我知道你們還想看對吧?那我就接續再寫下去。」那份激昂感,卻給了我們內心違和的感動。456Please respect copyright.PENANAB76p2WA7uV
還記得去年在Netflix看過殭屍校園,雖故事的起點不同,卻有類似的風格,而在中部開始傳染開來的病毒,又是否會使政府展開鎖國政策呢?456Please respect copyright.PENANAu2lEUSplQx
這又將會是另外的話題,我們便不多做討論。
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眼下,有的只剩讀者的幻想空間。
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【2】 Devor 白棘 $4000
▶#123 終末的煙火 #138 終末的海洋 #147 終末的冰箱
▶這三篇故事,可以分開閱讀獨立的章節,也可以連貫再一起成為一篇長篇。
▶語評
非常罕見的倒述寫法。456Please respect copyright.PENANAvAYlVXQx9R
在第三篇中我們才知道歐林456Please respect copyright.PENANAcGlpwcTzaf
這故是關鍵的人物456Please respect copyright.PENANAmFfGXii07c
自此才明白,原來他不僅僅是想要復活456Please respect copyright.PENANAUBqPA8Hstv
最強吸血鬼兼任戀人的芙蕾兒並且同時想延續那個諾言456Please respect copyright.PENANAgQKEJswiaY
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「我們的孩子」456Please respect copyright.PENANAne91UuwfhF
這連續性的故事寫法特殊、故事完整456Please respect copyright.PENANASYmnQ1mWZJ
實為本次【第六期創挑】中非常少見的用詞精簡,劇情完整的好文。456Please respect copyright.PENANAEnJfVznl9W
而相信自芙蕾兒離開前往新的星球後456Please respect copyright.PENANANPZA9c9LgC
也肯定還會有新的故事起點456Please respect copyright.PENANANTDif8nwCg
然而天下無不散的宴席456Please respect copyright.PENANAtoVq8tuej2
我們本次故事便到此結束456Please respect copyright.PENANAIWYo02J1nb
希望下次還能再次相遇
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【3】東加豆 $3000
▶#57 在雅典46度的邂逅
▶在眾多篇幅中,脫穎而出的是,故事僅只是讀過一次,卻能留下一種強烈的遺憾感,即便是第一次語評後,過了一年仍舊記得這篇故事。
▶語評
從引頸期盼到衝動遠行再到心灰意冷,全都只在一念轉瞬之間。456Please respect copyright.PENANAjJFoQ7qNzY
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時而濕冷刺骨,時而溫暖潤人。只有那若隱若現的鹽澀味。翻越了半個地球曲面的海風,再次又為女孩捎來了,希臘赤道的浪漫。456Please respect copyright.PENANAHtAPosvwVl
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然而,言語中就是躲藏不了的宿命。爭執,同時是不可避免的毒藥。456Please respect copyright.PENANAwHFwgaUR4U
雖然亞歷山大沉默寡言,卻又可能內心同樣掀起幾絲驚滔駭浪,過猶那地中海的濱海陸風。456Please respect copyright.PENANAUVf2jeUkLK
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十日的短暫浪漫,在最後無言的結局中就畫下了浪漫的破碎。璇姑娘,那女孩。在22歲的希臘,不帶走任何一片雲彩。
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【4】嚮往國度 $2000
▶#122 回不去的夏天
▶語評
或許,女孩在男孩的心目中,尚未離開世間,只是去了一趟旅行。456Please respect copyright.PENANAYnV4buj3A7
然而,她早已成為了徘徊在兩人過去記憶的地縛靈,只是男孩至今仍未知情。456Please respect copyright.PENANAVn79Nkk8MW
從首段讓讀者猜測,或許是與女孩的某項約定,卻未料想竟是場人鬼情未了。456Please respect copyright.PENANA5eEaiIzSLC
直當夏季,在眾人眼底,我仍舊是個念舊的傻瓜。456Please respect copyright.PENANA0F9ROVRE7V
----我也會赴約前往只有我倆的地方。456Please respect copyright.PENANAbWEgKsN5af
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我嘗試幻想,如果女孩不是同學,而是男孩的親妹妹呢?456Please respect copyright.PENANAtA7bb107Bu
會不會是父母親對他倆默許的戀兄情節呢?456Please respect copyright.PENANABL740BEl1D
最後的一栗核桃果,放進的並非只是男孩的口袋,反而是讀者的腦海深處的下丘帶,是令人抑鬱不住的交感情緒。456Please respect copyright.PENANA1x2fkAxiO6
房內的擺設習慣仍舊未變,然而變得是男孩儼然未知心態變化。456Please respect copyright.PENANAvGwZ85KG0S
直當年齡越大,約定束縛卻也越輕。只是他仍未發現而已。456Please respect copyright.PENANA9okHPQMGOC
「我還會再來此地嗎?」內心的他,或許有一天終會發現。456Please respect copyright.PENANAODi3hUiX7x
而從「想見你。」,直至餘生再也不見,那又會是怎麼樣子的感概呢?456Please respect copyright.PENANAuCrLeVvyAA
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「體貼不該在離別,你會讓該死心的的人還有留戀。」而妳最後的溫柔,也讓那個總是跌跌撞撞的男孩,終究打破了直男的心房,如此的明示,最終他也肯定發現了這些蛛絲馬跡了吧。456Please respect copyright.PENANAl3UmtqAdcU
我,還會再來嗎?每年盛夏,妳還會再此處嗎?456Please respect copyright.PENANAzkLgqcuTFi
陡然間,男孩的一抹淚痕伴隨著成長悄然滑下。
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男孩離開後山後,她對著空無一人無助地嘶喊著:「你,明年別再來了。」456Please respect copyright.PENANAxDqBQdYCEM
儘管未來,女孩不知道是否成為了男孩心中最熟悉的陌生人。但那奈河橋上,望穿著黃泉;凝視著他仍未走完人生的女孩,直至走過彼岸花叢,喝完了孟婆湯,她仍相信來生幾世,倆人肯定還能再相見。
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【5】大三明治 $2000
▶#86 拉普拉斯的白兔
▶語評
一個無限循環的惡夢(應該算是)456Please respect copyright.PENANALm45C472CU
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原先還在思索拉普拉斯的兔子的我,直到看完了故事才知道,我根本無需糾結這個地方。456Please respect copyright.PENANA0tQRGCaYIM
因為故事已經告訴我了。
文章開篇以學長為起點。456Please respect copyright.PENANAqhOTC17Urx
而故事線轉回到了從前。456Please respect copyright.PENANACSQ5Ve0rQe
自己也成了那個月曦口中的學長,令人感覺到不自覺的寒顫,而這份帶入感的恐懼,正是結尾伏筆所醞釀而出的感覺。
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【6】九指三爺 $1500
▶#23 爸爸,還要去哪裡玩?
▶語評
第一段尚未讀完,一道與父親訣別的感傷便先湧上心頭。456Please respect copyright.PENANAUTG57y15oR
父親未竟的誓言,是兩人心中永遠的隔閡。456Please respect copyright.PENANAeR9HfkUXUE
為何情感總道別離時才會讓人醞釀開來?456Please respect copyright.PENANAC75Zu1nQiv
又為何說別讓遺憾留下,卻滿地皆為遺憾?456Please respect copyright.PENANAHYIDyACUOc
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告別式中,可以想見的到,父親再娶的家庭該是與自己有著違和的場面;畢竟,自己本已就不屬於另個家庭的一份子。456Please respect copyright.PENANAyB2Tbsbniq
然而,雙方彼此嘗試性的接納,早已打破很多舊時代時候的情緒。456Please respect copyright.PENANAt8e2y9Nvy3
這點相信生活上只要遭遇過這種際遇的人,心底怕是比起你、我都更加了解。456Please respect copyright.PENANAHFdlQLltSe
由愛轉恨、恨轉怨,再到冷淡。456Please respect copyright.PENANAxLO7FgSnWq
這才是常態。
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父親厚繭的雙手,在威利心中是永成長時永遠的心魔。456Please respect copyright.PENANAeVyH75Khgp
直到最後一刻,得知了父親原是愛著自己的時候,淚水又該如何能止住潸落。456Please respect copyright.PENANATOckJHDPpn
一代親情,未竟的諾言,終究還是謊言。456Please respect copyright.PENANAEdDIxMhmuw
即便,在告別式中聽到了這些真實話語,可父親仍舊一次都回來見過自己一面,又何如?456Please respect copyright.PENANAGRIa73WuZG
一句「父親,接著去哪玩......?」沉重般的自喃,更多的卻是解放開對自己的束縛,並非是對父親救贖。
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告別式後,這些人或許餘生不見。456Please respect copyright.PENANAW2dFDOtJID
然而,此等心情又豈是說忘就忘。456Please respect copyright.PENANAMfM3Mltf59
原來,痛便是忘了怎麼把過去給忘掉。
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這個盛夏,剩下遺憾。
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【7】思凡 $1500
▶#94 贈我予年
▶語評
故事的結尾是有著強烈的後勁的。456Please respect copyright.PENANA2mIxj6jhzH
整篇閱讀後,在開頭以宋予年在百忙之中,突然發覺了「她」的名字,突然之間再次走入了自己的人生。456Please respect copyright.PENANAf7R1467Mun
至此,幾年前分別以後。456Please respect copyright.PENANA8ZwHpO455D
情感又悄悄地、毫無預警的映入了生命之中。456Please respect copyright.PENANA34EWHju6yK
456Please respect copyright.PENANAiiX3lT3Fbu
「贈我,予年。」或許標題應當可以分開兩字來讀。456Please respect copyright.PENANAQTH2bqx9wt
文中沒有提及到女孩當初為何離開了,然而,接續著故事推敲,讓我們得知。456Please respect copyright.PENANANht526SRui
也是是疾病纏身。456Please respect copyright.PENANAEQODcuInnt
也迫不得已,離開了他。456Please respect copyright.PENANAX1Uvol42RX
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贈我,是一個約定。456Please respect copyright.PENANAgya2gui7Da
一個約定券的約定。 456Please respect copyright.PENANAUV7UCzJdr7
而再見之時,人事已非。456Please respect copyright.PENANAMmXWXgR8ct
那個我已經不再是原本的那個我,但你還會深愛著我嗎?456Please respect copyright.PENANAcoq9qDSmfK
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此刻,盛夏煙花燦爛,卻不如妳。456Please respect copyright.PENANAhiqCD3VtKg
或許,再見不遠。 456Please respect copyright.PENANABEp0Szy9yt
讓就那緣起三生起,三生滅吧。
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【8】青蒼 Cyanblue $1500
▶#47 青夏,十七歲
▶語評
如同青澀地稚嫩十八未滿。那愛戀都如此單純與小心翼翼。
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女方刻意放緩的進度向前,歷經長達三年感情滋養,在學年畢業的最後一刻,差點翻船的心情更是令人跟隨帶入那份苦澀。456Please respect copyright.PENANAwdRnHQqnQh
就像青春微酸甜那般。456Please respect copyright.PENANAWkm4C2oYjW
忌妒、單戀,都是青春代表物。456Please respect copyright.PENANAlyf10lCCqj
林夏芮不按照牌理出牌的外向性格,羅青澤在最後眼淚落下那刻才敲響了內心的鐘鳴,迴盪在內心心頭。456Please respect copyright.PENANAqDzma1fDJ1
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「原來這就是喜歡的心思。」我們不能怪男生呆如愚木,畢竟又有多少人能在高中時期對於未來、對於愛情掌握的滿分修行呢?456Please respect copyright.PENANAr4RjbVBfgM
夏天的故事,炙熱卻又充滿了愛戀的渲染。比擬冬日,我們更加容易觸動是主動的熱情。456Please respect copyright.PENANAFeAVCt053E
劉子傑的主動,或許在我們眼底,更像是跳樑小丑那般故作醜態。456Please respect copyright.PENANAWH6eckD3FT
但就現實面來說,如果今天劉子傑與羅青澤兩人都具備同等的帥氣,同等的條件,那麼主動宣示的那方勝率還是會更高。456Please respect copyright.PENANAfuANuORdiI
或許,歷經過這次的告白失敗,在未來能成為他愛情的一個學分也猶未可知。456Please respect copyright.PENANAC5GJEXWXNK
反而寫成了另一個故事的主角。456Please respect copyright.PENANA01WzQBZ39v
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「人間的確荒謬,可我們還是能在這個人間拾溫柔。」故事曖昧的兩小無猜終成一對眷侶,而畢業後、就業後,又是否能續緣,我們無法猜測最後結局。456Please respect copyright.PENANAHqj9oKBsdD
心動往往只是一剎那,喜歡卻是一輩子的記憶。456Please respect copyright.PENANAGAqhjZ807k
如果有一天,我們也面臨那份剎那的怦然心動,你/妳又是否敢勇於這份悸動,邁向這份回應呢?456Please respect copyright.PENANAHArURgPwr5
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夏天,依舊是夏天。但不一樣是我們的內心。
456Please respect copyright.PENANAhhY6FCBFI1
【9】墨云 $1500
▶#28 盛夏與魔女
▶語評
這是我見過最鮮蝦的奇幻劇情了。456Please respect copyright.PENANAi63IdsfA9w
尤其這男人,絕對是個狠人,全部的純情只為了鋪敘結尾的那慾望。
456Please respect copyright.PENANAm6kCGP8331
開門見山的斗大魔女標題,早已告訴了這不能用平常的校園看待故事。456Please respect copyright.PENANA7dWu7ShSMF
而更為新奇的是簡單的一個小手段就處理好了,蟬靈的糾結,這同時打破了我對魔女的刻板印象。456Please respect copyright.PENANA5I8GEzfb5m
魔女的天然呆更是突如其來一筆。456Please respect copyright.PENANAE5y1vQfKlO
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最後,故事的結尾再次迎來一次,天外飛來兩筆的性慾交易,這確實打破了讀者對於故事原先的美好幻想。456Please respect copyright.PENANAtP6GHy1KxL
只得獲得一次白眼與冰冷感。
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【10】罪夜 $1500
▶#169 戀愛炸彈
▶語評
藉由肉體爆炸的引爆點劃開了對於戀愛的追求,是那樣獨特卻又邪門。456Please respect copyright.PENANAPf7uFFRLgv
456Please respect copyright.PENANAojW3UAodVq
百鬼夜行獨見妳。千里迷離卻是妳。456Please respect copyright.PENANAXpdcWCSAqk
我喜愛著,這般怪異卻令人心動的瞬間。456Please respect copyright.PENANASF7T51ihK7
因那悸動。456Please respect copyright.PENANA61n5g4L3HP
往往竟是那瞬間。
456Please respect copyright.PENANAu5owdpce6E
即便長大後再交往的女排球隊長,仍舊不行。456Please respect copyright.PENANAyjc4H2B2tv
式風透過了那次的爆炸,早已在尋響內心埋下了一顆揮之不去的種子。456Please respect copyright.PENANA4iVmoqKPPj
真愛,不僅是人與人之間的感情,更是當你真心喜愛某事、某物,而願意竭盡心力的付出,使他變得更好、更幸福。456Please respect copyright.PENANA2lQrNCVElY
那麼讓自己爆炸,也算是一種真愛嗎?456Please respect copyright.PENANAhNFz6AaSAw
456Please respect copyright.PENANAnJjZgDe2lo
語畢,尋響的爆炸是否讓兩人在另一個百鬼的世界相守相繫,這個猶未可知。456Please respect copyright.PENANAy8CgORrx0V
但至少可以確定的是,他卻早已觸動了內心最深處的那個戀愛因子了。456Please respect copyright.PENANAJuFEe5KbbM
「我感到心滿意足。」然而他滿意的就是真的是自己也喜愛著對方,又抑或是對方仍舊七年來愛著自己呢?
456Please respect copyright.PENANABcLPSznL0p
【11】 舉一千從 $1000
▶#182 〈澐寨舞〉
▶語評(詳留言)
456Please respect copyright.PENANAcFZtDyYMCz
【12】 莫軒 $1000
▶#239 末世終結之後,我在破曉的晨曦窺見夏日的生機,但故人不再
▶語評(詳留言)
456Please respect copyright.PENANA8irXGI9uJp
【13】 逆流而上 $1000
▶#185+189+192 蘇拉與山竹
▶語評(詳留言)
456Please respect copyright.PENANAneAtBGyPNo
【14】指尖之間 $1000
▶#119 回憶剩夏,不增減的約定
▶語評(詳留言)
456Please respect copyright.PENANALTpdkZ1LUY
【15】Mag Kan $1000
▶#231 那年盛夏,我們沒有約定
▶語評(詳留言)
456Please respect copyright.PENANA8xV24Mr0n1
【16】沙發王的故事 $1000
▶#24 我們約定好了喔?
▶語評(詳留言)
456Please respect copyright.PENANAhjnMLNJlyx
【17】八十公里路 $1000
▶#10 我的心裡,還有夏天嗎
▶語評(詳留言)
456Please respect copyright.PENANA04lZeBtEnF
【18】 不寫文的紜啊 $1000
▶#43 《失約》
▶語評(詳留言)
456Please respect copyright.PENANAzbzCygQ2uJ
【19】 夜臨 $1000
▶#49 天使大人的玻璃傘
▶語評(詳留言)
456Please respect copyright.PENANAY5yUqVpD2M
【20】笑耶 $1000
▶#214+216+218 故地重遊(上+中+下)
▶語評(詳留言)
456Please respect copyright.PENANAaTxyG47Le0
【佳作1】莫軒 $500
▶#77 我如何把你比作夏天?
【佳作2】But $500
▶#150 夏天!當然是暑假到處玩啦
【佳作3】供過佛的多多綠 $500
▶#67 那年盛夏
【佳作4】旭音愁渺 $500
▶#198 一起做餅乾
【佳作5】癲客道人 $500
▶#136 日間顯影
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【複評未上榜】
▶#6 盛夏之夢 ▶#50 滿天星 ▶#146 夏戀 ▶#238 夏雨滂沱
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新詩類
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【1】西帆 $4000
▶#203 夏•冬眠
▶語評
本作於擬人、擬物手法上十分精巧456Please respect copyright.PENANAAc69jcUrWO
重複運用卻又沒有多餘的氛圍456Please respect copyright.PENANApT0AhXjaIF
而藉由水果方式提升(味覺)456Please respect copyright.PENANA27N1KPAfFo
我想更是使閱讀來能有另一種味道,而不止是品詩這麼簡單456Please respect copyright.PENANAFL3alTT3hS
而是是人在食用時能入口即化456Please respect copyright.PENANAksoBv9zprX
456Please respect copyright.PENANAdGAB4xQs6X
456Please respect copyright.PENANASVaQk0a3uZ
「嘗試把心臟調慢」456Please respect copyright.PENANAeQ59MO1SbT
我尤以喜歡這句,心臟當然不會跳動變慢,但內心(精神)的感覺卻可以,慢而持久456Please respect copyright.PENANA0JyYqEiZXM
使人不會因為時間的洪流456Please respect copyright.PENANAIIzHHsz9WD
失去了炙熱456Please respect copyright.PENANA8Bl26ZknF3
456Please respect copyright.PENANA3gPGOBlSfV
456Please respect copyright.PENANAEZgHm8JdJ4
詩名為《夏,冬眠》456Please respect copyright.PENANAPLQVsOeDJG
但夏季怎麼會有雪456Please respect copyright.PENANAkBzsPwiZuO
令人加以反思456Please respect copyright.PENANAhZMiUKUe7V
雪季不該有的畫面456Please respect copyright.PENANAcqlWg92fFI
卻如那噠噠的馬蹄聲,走過歲月的容顏456Please respect copyright.PENANAONukrw38Zn
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或許456Please respect copyright.PENANAnInQO3D9NX
不只這個夏季呼吸充滿著冰凍的雪氣456Please respect copyright.PENANA0m1z5AZjH9
即便是來年456Please respect copyright.PENANAMyh7NnrmbJ
之後的每一年都依然如此
456Please respect copyright.PENANAp36wVwtumW
【2】 Nølav 挪拉夫 $3000
▶#102 戀夏
▶語評
情有幾分、愛有幾分,情愛一生只不過是貪戀癡嗔。456Please respect copyright.PENANAAOidwNcWb5
如那鄭少秋歌詞裡的悲傷優柔,我仍沐浴在這片刻的悸夏蕩漾之間,正如首段那句夜星彌留著如你的容顏,這會令人更加拌佐孤寂的味道,與憶起漸行漸遠的那伊人。456Please respect copyright.PENANAMqJqy7TRiZ
456Please respect copyright.PENANArpIUtVspg8
我打江南走過,卻仍等候的是你季節裡的容顏如島國般夏風。456Please respect copyright.PENANAz2OAr6s9P1
猶如鹹濕海風,亦如她漆黑雙眸之間是否仍容下有你的一隅。456Please respect copyright.PENANApPFEv44B0A
又如我吱吱的淺吻聲是美麗的衝動。456Please respect copyright.PENANABXqkDSpAot
我不是歸人,是個過客。夏季仍舊是夏季。456Please respect copyright.PENANA4lWu1mDZPF
456Please respect copyright.PENANAVQ3I0VHJWg
景物依然,妳卻不然。456Please respect copyright.PENANAQHpH6R5Xo4
多年已逝,歲月靜好不在。456Please respect copyright.PENANAg6uy0kw2CK
更多的是此刻的情殤。456Please respect copyright.PENANAX3G7XCfFrt
456Please respect copyright.PENANAxlFuC9I5On
而長生殿上楊玉環,幽怨了千年至今仍迴盪那長恨歌。456Please respect copyright.PENANACdfGg0rvuY
又是否譬如我此時的心思呢?456Please respect copyright.PENANA88Lu4Vc5wy
春霧與東嶺再臨我又是否安然平靜呢?456Please respect copyright.PENANAF9M7UpPh7I
456Please respect copyright.PENANAQBVX2yDhHs
456Please respect copyright.PENANANAQpKA6GD3
夏季,這絢麗。456Please respect copyright.PENANAwSCjQICNof
如曇花一現的煙花。456Please respect copyright.PENANAbY2xnGdnjK
就讓今夜重燃內心那苗火吧!
456Please respect copyright.PENANAaX5BvXW7E9
【3】霧散、秋殘 $2000
▶#12 夏
▶語評
詩詞中區分為序、插、終。456Please respect copyright.PENANAip6wm8TxWK
同如起、轉、合三處意境。456Please respect copyright.PENANAhzP0SMODgH
456Please respect copyright.PENANAMkQ7B17MDi
以古詩破題,新詩釋義自己情意。456Please respect copyright.PENANA4BwRd1FQMi
456Please respect copyright.PENANAaHiMb4OQt6
六月、七月的芒夏荷香四溢,令人心曠神怡流連忘返。456Please respect copyright.PENANA0nH6S98nkE
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卻不知這竟是否為大夢誰先覺,夢醒一場空呢?
456Please respect copyright.PENANAUIkj3bHVS2
【4】宅米蟲子 $1500
▶#157 殘夏中秋(樂府詩)
▶語評
三生三世皆躲不過命運的輪迴456Please respect copyright.PENANA3OhRTejRPL
夢裡百花卻也沒妳的笑顏盛開456Please respect copyright.PENANAE3gIfmybDf
456Please respect copyright.PENANANnWHMQ97qx
細雨紛飛絕情綿綿456Please respect copyright.PENANAfSNnRy2Lio
句中江畔相隨456Please respect copyright.PENANAzPrscEKymd
卻又未知天意是何在456Please respect copyright.PENANAZiDJjY8bZV
456Please respect copyright.PENANAckAJT2BwOa
即便是狂嘯 悲歌456Please respect copyright.PENANAZ8xwHSJsTW
天上繁星 銀河456Please respect copyright.PENANAWmeehnLvu0
也僅是萬千世界的一粟456Please respect copyright.PENANA5CPw5SYE30
卻找不出能取掉你的其一456Please respect copyright.PENANAanVDtrETDW
456Please respect copyright.PENANA7X5ef0N7GH
從回到閣樓456Please respect copyright.PENANACjnUMNtJql
又再次漫步獨醉456Please respect copyright.PENANADhbwTUuxoh
是心裡的牽掛令人陶醉456Please respect copyright.PENANArSb28Xxiku
還是物理的酒精使人沉醉456Please respect copyright.PENANAjgBwYOUjnb
早已在你染塵衣袖分不清了456Please respect copyright.PENANAS3l1wbdv7d
456Please respect copyright.PENANAPZkYCi2Oh6
黃泉彼岸花開,所引出的火照之路456Please respect copyright.PENANAbmfTajibm8
也不過只是再次三世456Please respect copyright.PENANATtRzc0xbbb
與妳再相逢的一場作戲罷了
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【5】 艾米莉 $1500
▶#3 仲夏夢華
▶語評
《仲夏夜之夢》A Midsummer Night's Dream源自於文藝復興文豪莎士比亞創作的浪漫喜劇。456Please respect copyright.PENANAuccCbBSyGN
「仲夏夜」指的是一年之中白晝最長的夏至前後,相傳這一天晚上是精靈活躍的時刻,會有許多不可思議的奇幻事情發生。456Please respect copyright.PENANAFvcLXLbkkU
在PENANA的賴群組中求教 #闇夜星河 #星秤 兩位,得知原是精靈的惡作劇進而造成了這場愛恨糾葛的多角關係。456Please respect copyright.PENANAmPBRwxXMuB
(感謝科普。)456Please respect copyright.PENANAmynXhozDT5
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然而在十多年前求學階段,魚魚第一次聽到仲夏夜這個詞,並不在西洋古典所見到,反而是在《xxxholic》、《TSUBASA翼》這部早期神作中看到一詞;接續再次聽到是在我大學選修一堂《神話英語》的課程再次聽到。456Please respect copyright.PENANAFUpFXxJAKd
在高中時期,熱愛小說、動漫、電玩的我,這些是我課後逐漸成為作家(廢人)的養分來源,這些過往我們就暫且不再說明。456Please respect copyright.PENANAqoLNQRK12M
456Please respect copyright.PENANAIJtd9VBGDB
AMYS大的新詩中,可以從簡樸日常的景物,如枝頭樹影、街道行人、沙灘繁星再到湖滔漣漪等,想像的到,這對戀人從初視、打傘、相依直至心底的共鳴。456Please respect copyright.PENANAWTVUj8QsFq
簡單的美好,竟可以這般簡單。456Please respect copyright.PENANA3UnOsTdtj3
如梁靜茹<為我好>專輯內,像剝橘子這般簡單的幸福,可以唾手可得的滿足,也或許對某些人來說非常的困難。這些取決在於人的內心想法。456Please respect copyright.PENANA309OeVPhmH
456Please respect copyright.PENANAEgiDnTVSxu
仲夏之間少了點的是激情。456Please respect copyright.PENANAEWkFKEB5SP
仲夏之間多出些的是清淡。456Please respect copyright.PENANAQ9MIaBS6my
檯面下的暗流湧動,或許僅只是讀者所看不到的他們內心的洶湧。456Please respect copyright.PENANATev2NrB9Na
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而我只知,仲夏夢宴正演奏著一道清新的情愛。
456Please respect copyright.PENANAKkSNTBMLiz
【6】紫小絢 $1000
▶#51 花夢之無聲
▶語評
無語的花瓣,自小嚮往著自由綻放的藍天白雲,夏蟬與飛鳥的佐伴。曾經多麼遙想著那份追逐的渴望。
456Please respect copyright.PENANArDT8OTkeef
與其說是羨慕,倒是幾分憤世嫉俗的意味所在。456Please respect copyright.PENANAadUdGEmsaY
456Please respect copyright.PENANAvgbAHy6FcA
直至,雨過天青,才發覺原來自己仍舊擁有著雨滴的相擁。456Please respect copyright.PENANABcAUVKbApm
而我們又何必在意那天空藍呢?
456Please respect copyright.PENANANHWvKTNYsp
【7】宅米蟲子 $1000
▶#78 兩世笙花
▶語評
五月成熟的梅樹,透過初夏將其青梅韻開酒香該是多麼令人陶醉的畫面,而再多上幾株該採下的花枝,豈不樂乎?456Please respect copyright.PENANAww0HNQ97Si
456Please respect copyright.PENANAVGbTlCelaq
一抹玄龍劃破了淡薄的心防。456Please respect copyright.PENANAtKbFLzpPJx
美景再好都無法平息,我倆的已然造成的誤解。456Please respect copyright.PENANABxQgWHPFYA
白華如是一道流星墜落,墜落於重生與你的羈絆。456Please respect copyright.PENANALiJo7NqwmZ
456Please respect copyright.PENANAiAPPkA3MR8
而在反覆讀完了宅米蟲子<兩世笙花>後,想起了兩世輪迴的仙履奇緣,其中經典的一段台詞:「曾經有一段真摯的愛情在我面前,但我沒有去珍惜,直到失去了以後才後悔莫及,塵世間最痛苦的莫過於此......」456Please respect copyright.PENANAtdDYRiT08A
456Please respect copyright.PENANAF9WEHtD9k6
造物弄人,倆世為人而今生卻與你交杯喝上壺合丞酒,可為多少輩子所修來的福分。456Please respect copyright.PENANAdwmIYX7eAB
456Please respect copyright.PENANAXC8tsKQxkV
前世,已放下。456Please respect copyright.PENANA1xTVg0XVRM
今來,是泛起了一水漣漪。456Please respect copyright.PENANArJinoUnm7v
456Please respect copyright.PENANA6lLs82T722
如不是身分所牽絆,我便放棄了所有與你共赴天崖海角。
456Please respect copyright.PENANApc417Ta78x
【8】Nicolea $1000
▶#121 夏
▶語評
夏季田園的美好景色,映襯著一片祥和的欣欣向榮。456Please respect copyright.PENANAZeb7I80bIR
如同中學時期讀過了一首宋代曾做《頌》詩:456Please respect copyright.PENANAYsj2jreiEv
「春有百花秋有月,夏有涼風冬有雪。若無閒事掛心頭,便是人間好時節。」456Please respect copyright.PENANAVbGDvO5n09
456Please respect copyright.PENANANiy2y5WADf
而這份難得的清幽,確實隨著年齡的增長。456Please respect copyright.PENANAiSgRwMNGwC
越是得來不易。456Please respect copyright.PENANAaCrIHG30wY
456Please respect copyright.PENANAeKyXVMupba
田中牧童的玉笛繚繞著蟬聲裊裊。456Please respect copyright.PENANA6F6RXMJpYn
這該是人生如何的片刻煙花璀璨。456Please respect copyright.PENANAH562TvZLMT
只得盼望,人生還能再得這般閒情逸致。
456Please respect copyright.PENANAO4PcSpYKDP
【9】胡殷 $1000
▶#137 鳳凰花
▶語評
夏季雖為離別時節,卻也是人生成長的必經道路。456Please respect copyright.PENANAkXhObaCrU2
眼淚是曖昧的催化劑,也是愛情的火藥。456Please respect copyright.PENANAsAihknWdoO
人走茶未涼卻為下一次再相遇時而香。456Please respect copyright.PENANAbGBIz47y70
如我們未盡的緣分這般。456Please respect copyright.PENANABmxIwt4eH7
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相親相見知何日,此時此夜難為情。456Please respect copyright.PENANAEEl6fMGBxk
而我卻因這片花落,這道蟬聲所困惑。456Please respect copyright.PENANAuovHULrPhQ
即便歷經了離別後夏風的迎撫,也無法抽離曾經的嬉戲。456Please respect copyright.PENANA4DaGsmqOXd
456Please respect copyright.PENANALbnBP1qfY2
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妳與我是否曾有探險過那道友誼塹壁後的道路。456Please respect copyright.PENANAadSHyq2npM
我並不知情。456Please respect copyright.PENANAxc8VaZndht
也不再無從得知。456Please respect copyright.PENANAcqKcrnfSDt
456Please respect copyright.PENANApoYS4FZAlQ
456Please respect copyright.PENANAZTttQ99tS0
「隻身回望太匆匆,此生多少情與仇。456Please respect copyright.PENANAotbIYviWFA
無邊絲雨細如愁,朝來寒雨幾回眸。」456Please respect copyright.PENANA0VJwCc9tNA
只得對空一嘆,老天給予了我們太短的夢醒時分。456Please respect copyright.PENANA9jT3sHC0q9
此刻,我只擁著憶起最後鳳凰花下,妳牽起我的悸動,約定未忘的誓言罷了。456Please respect copyright.PENANA4DX0zV6pgo
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未來,我們還會有機會再見嗎?來世,我們還會續緣嗎?還是,我只個過客?
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【10】林賾流 $1000
▶#83 烈陽之影
▶語評
開篇以豔陽不可直視456Please respect copyright.PENANAuGnznUWiUN
寫出了真實的太陽給予人的強盛456Please respect copyright.PENANAxP8oGhjW8u
並以柔和手法,側寫隨著時間經過,很快又能再見到的期待456Please respect copyright.PENANAFkbMEvw0A2
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而在萬里無雲的日常456Please respect copyright.PENANAqGgNnD7oyz
大地照耀出了你的光芒456Please respect copyright.PENANATZd7ZLtAng
只想著短暫沒有你的存在456Please respect copyright.PENANAHZq3p50sDa
與緬懷影子的並行456Please respect copyright.PENANAQDIsKyxw2g
456Please respect copyright.PENANAGhhbkuhFMU
而東升初陽如一雙碩壯的大手456Please respect copyright.PENANA4TYRionfqA
敲響了人群一日的序幕456Please respect copyright.PENANADCBOeuoziV
島與海456Please respect copyright.PENANAtIUKQZtp02
又為何區分你、我呢456Please respect copyright.PENANARIEULgZFfv
如同我仰望著巍峨的山峰山鋒也正仰望著你456Please respect copyright.PENANAvV0uxeX1ij
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隨著四季的變化456Please respect copyright.PENANA1yEDOQBL5H
夏季卻是此刻我影跡糾纏最久時456Please respect copyright.PENANA2FR53c6kZ3
直至,我忘卻了
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那個我
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【佳作1】 宅米蟲子 $1000
▶#170 夏祈杳杳
▶語評
本篇相對於前兩篇樂府詩456Please respect copyright.PENANAVPb7jJjIJJ
詩意要較為薄弱456Please respect copyright.PENANAPTJ7teBf68
但仍是一首很棒的古詩
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之所以我認為相對較弱的部分456Please respect copyright.PENANAOrzAD6UWn8
是其意境 與用詞的閱讀感456Please respect copyright.PENANAqzIIZZ1Bq8
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【兩世笙花】、【殘夏中秋】中皆有一個顯眼的主題,但在【夏祈杳杳】中以花鋪景,望卻天上星闕流露出了一絲孤寂與深沉的感受。456Please respect copyright.PENANAR3MAb5yuR6
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或許是【兩世笙花】的一抹玄龍劃破淡薄心防,思念太深。456Please respect copyright.PENANAPBrNgEBW1S
也許是【殘夏中秋】的細雨紛飛絕情綿綿,景色太美。456Please respect copyright.PENANA3k2M7byihR
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再嗑完了兩份深沉的憂愁後,重回到了【夏祈杳杳】,別有另外一種,希望來年梧桐花開,伊人會再來的期望。456Please respect copyright.PENANAUzqvLqKepa
更多是抱持著,能夠等待,並且那人是可以等得到的感受。456Please respect copyright.PENANANbZDKmqE0v
故此,以其作為比較下,兩者意境高低立判。456Please respect copyright.PENANAIlX9STwaXY
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當然,宅米的詩無庸置疑放在蕉園上都是罕有敵手,皆為佳作。456Please respect copyright.PENANAaF4bHUcnJs
詩的優缺,僅憑讀者當下的心境去解讀。456Please respect copyright.PENANAaZHLMeNM07
每個人的角度皆為不同。456Please respect copyright.PENANA2PC9mGYovo
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有人感受深刻,456Please respect copyright.PENANA2OCdDmOQee
有人無感,456Please respect copyright.PENANAMQ2uUv24bm
各有差異。456Please respect copyright.PENANA2gPt97Fu0U
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而我僅是那茫茫人海中,456Please respect copyright.PENANAicN6XiXwjM
因其而感受到詩中情摯所渲染一名騷客。
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【佳作2】柏木桐柊 $1000
▶#58 也許我還會夢見你
▶語評
或許,她的影跡已成過往。窗櫺映入柔情似水,而匯聚成今夜的輾轉難眠。456Please respect copyright.PENANAGvjm30nSPH
我望不及妳眼底的星空漫步,而夏季裡還仍猶存妳餘溫。妳說的那些在我的世界又算得是什麼,留下的不過是在保險櫃裡的一抹笑意。我早已分不清,夏日我倆是否曾約定過,而捧上手中代表著祝福的黃玫瑰。456Please respect copyright.PENANAgkKttDZpzt
這不代表著我倆有過曾經。夏夜裡。獨自釀著夢中還偶然遇見的妳。456Please respect copyright.PENANAUV9D2LDNoL
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柏木桐柊文筆能力在短短數筆之下,運用了大量的暗喻及景色來比擬離情的傷感。醪、櫺兩字都是極其罕見的同義字,在詩句之間也靈活運用自己的特色
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【佳作3】 余軍 $1000
▶#139 七夕夜茫茫
▶語評
銀燭秋光冷畫屏,輕羅小扇撲流螢。456Please respect copyright.PENANA5AixN14d28
天階夜色涼如水,臥看牽牛織女星。456Please respect copyright.PENANAICcE9ZSboU
即便過了一千兩百年,我們仍可想見在宮中拿著圓扇揮舞著螢火蟲的宮女,是幾般哀愁著,在涼意襲人的季夏中,孤獨賞月。456Please respect copyright.PENANAdY9VyjDmKY
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每每七夕時分總是容易遭受羨煞旁人的眷侶炸眼球。456Please respect copyright.PENANAcTkTy7dLi7
而這對於此刻孤寂的人,將變得更加孤寂萬分。456Please respect copyright.PENANAZJyvE6gssb
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也許,他仍等待著茫茫人中那個她。456Please respect copyright.PENANASz1D2Z9ioB
也許,他只不過是她生命中的過客。456Please respect copyright.PENANASFcGJB234I
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偷偷遙望著,她的限時動態。456Please respect copyright.PENANAGnrpdLgZGp
悄悄祝福著,她的喜訊分享。456Please respect copyright.PENANATwhkNDcwLo
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七夕。456Please respect copyright.PENANAPAZghvdrUt
是個情感放大百倍的敏感時節。456Please respect copyright.PENANA2pnxszXvQ4
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在銀河伴隨著夜幕,總是能不經意地想起了某個她。456Please respect copyright.PENANAZ6rCFCK4Ey
或許,這才是那年盛夏,最難忘的約定了吧。
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【佳作4】虛冲 $1000
▶#228 仲夏夜之詩
▶語評
道長這首寫實敘事的打油詩456Please respect copyright.PENANAZPz5K1epqX
用道地口吻方式呈現456Please respect copyright.PENANAHzotJ6FoWw
別有一番令人感同身受的味道456Please respect copyright.PENANANuOPz39Njj
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華麗的新詩固然有深沈456Please respect copyright.PENANApxIHHH0F4Y
反覆咀嚼的口感456Please respect copyright.PENANArNvdMdcOfV
但相較於打油詩456Please respect copyright.PENANAeS1yibTNFb
卻更能反映生活上的記趣456Please respect copyright.PENANAH9BwK0Uud0
又或者應該說是上班藍領族的無奈吧!456Please respect copyright.PENANAH1YHxta6G8
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夏季沉悶、炙熱456Please respect copyright.PENANA5AF4MaLvUd
而很難讓人能對於煩躁事情456Please respect copyright.PENANAUnj4pn4J0d
保持理性與忍耐456Please respect copyright.PENANAMfM3wBFqCi
故此,我們應該適時調整自己步伐
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抬起頭來456Please respect copyright.PENANAUESgqDwYuW
深深吸一口氣456Please respect copyright.PENANAJBsCVGDYgw
靜下來看一下周遭的事物456Please respect copyright.PENANAMrMpegtiHC
仍舊有著許多美好的細節
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【佳作5】胤宸 $1000
▶#53 那時風若來
▶語評
花自飄零水自流。456Please respect copyright.PENANAWxeodYiyw9
一種相思,兩處閒愁。456Please respect copyright.PENANATAYDQrCIjJ
此情無計可消除,才下眉頭,卻上心頭。456Please respect copyright.PENANAXwkl2iSAOG
同如<<李清照>>的一剪梅,而這西湖庭院盈滿的荷風又與易安居士筆下那殘荷,抽象暨不易捉摸的思想感情相較,誰更勝一籌呢?456Please respect copyright.PENANAyKSI4fKuNm
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獨賞荷葉,飄蕩於塘邊,一抹光照滑過一池漣漪。456Please respect copyright.PENANAUa2ToIeDg2
卻無心這番閒情逸致,內心仍未那尚未赴約的風而風,掛記了心頭,酒、荷、影皆為而動,卻因那三缺一的風美中不足。456Please respect copyright.PENANARUk9nbcI5h
慧開禪師那經典一句「春有百花秋有月,夏有涼風冬有雪,若無閒事掛心頭,便是人間好時節。」 456Please respect copyright.PENANADMv1xyGNxI
而其中「若無閒事在心頭」更是把心中沒有掛慮,便是好時節詮釋的淋漓盡致。456Please respect copyright.PENANA7gjAvv2JcM
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人生在世,總為數不清的事情苦惱、煩躁,如果可真心放下了這些東西,簡直美麗得太過不要了。456Please respect copyright.PENANAI73gFGx4xR
風,是否能在夏日再次吹拂。456Please respect copyright.PENANA7A7gYHzsHp
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我們仍未可知。456Please respect copyright.PENANAI2i8s1iIZU
但卻明白另一事,眼前這番美酒,如果可以那便今朝有酒今朝醉吧。
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【複評未上榜】
▶#55 薰夏誓約,詩綺永存 ▶#176 逃夏 ▶#194 致逝去的夏
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特殊獎項
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【最佳電腦繪畫獎】LiCh 阿立 $3000
▶#195 Sunny Come Back
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【最佳創作金曲獎】W.H. $3000
▶#212 夏之熱力學
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感謝贊助本場創作挑戰的各路金主
Penana小熊 15500P!!!!!!
伍拾陸 5600P!!
月亮熊 5000P!!
夏坂Moonight 5000P!!
InDeeeer 4000P!!
容霜 3000P!
谷映塵(員外) 2000P!
W.H. 2000P!
笑具 1500P!
知閒言炎 1000P!
筆墨談兵 1000P!
Sandy 1000P!
悲艾 1000P!
月月 800P!
宅米蟲子 起源 Nicolea 葉月晉久HS 墨云 巫尚益 100-200P
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本期創挑心得
(1)是的,由於這個評比斷斷續續,歷經了接近一年的時間,在時效性上早已失去了觀眾的熱誠,途中發現有些人已經退出PENANA。
其中我感到最惋惜的是夏坂Moonight老師,他在本期的3篇作品都是上乘的好文,由於我的拖延症,讓大家失去了能讀上更好作品的機會。
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(2)排名評比,是我的閱讀程度與個人感觀去排序,或許,你會覺得為何他的作品比我好呢?
這邊,我歡迎大家都能提出討論。
不希望反而因為排名,引發筆戰,那就失去了開心創作本身的意義了。
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(3)本期在#195樓LiCh 阿立大大的「Sunny Come Back」,是我開始創作挑戰以來,收到最大得驚喜了,我萬萬想不到竟然會有這麼精彩的投稿,讓我當下受寵若驚,太幸福了吧。
各位,如果喜歡歡迎到LICH大的粉絲專頁,拜讀他的作品。
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(4)分數上,本次我並沒有參用到「閱讀數」或是「喜歡數」這個數據,因為我怕會對於文筆上的排名失準,不過我還是先將我初評、複評的經過都貼上來給各位看看。
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(5)好啦,廢話有點多。
這邊希望大家都能去我得其他幾個創作挑戰看看。
如果你們喜歡的話,都幫我書籤起來吧!
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另外
已經開始,各位準備磨拳擦掌吧!!!!!!!!
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如果可以幫我打賞本篇(會當作下期獎金)
為下期創挑添上一份心力XD
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謝謝~456Please respect copyright.PENANAJjPbDBmX14