首先,在此說聲感謝。
【第6期創作挑戰】歷時1年才將其完成評比。
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原先應該在今年初完成最終結語。
但在這期間,我遇到了職場上必須離開台灣本島一段很長的時間。
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身邊除了沒有電腦用,又外加大寶處於一歲難照顧的時期,同時間又懷了二寶。
生活的考驗不斷地消彌我對於創作的熱誠,與占據了大多數的空閒。
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我必須說。
很遺憾的有些人在一年後已經離開了蕉園。
他(她)們沒能等待到這一次的落幕。
也很可惜。
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最後,我將再次感謝你們願意耐心等待這場落幕儀式。
-----Lonely Fish 2024.11.06
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恭喜第六期的創作挑戰榮獲2023創作挑戰第二名的殊榮
這次的費時長達一年的時間來完成評比。
這裡我可以大膽的跟各位報告,每一篇作品少說都讀過兩次以上,並且全部都留下語評。
240篇文筆不一的文章,我必須老實說「讀起來,真的燒腦的一蹋糊塗。」
但創作理念熱誠還在,這些都不是問題。
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以上廢話結束。
接著,我們準備公布這次的成績,並在後面留下一點這個創作挑戰的心得。
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由於篇幅眾多。(小說類190篇,新詩類44篇,其他6篇。)
我採取小說正取前20篇,以我個人主觀挑選在故事劇情、用字、人物刻劃都能拿上檯面。
並且讓人願意反覆閱讀的好作品。
我會「盡量」挑選字數符合在1500字的作品。
另外,在新詩的部分,由於主題應當以新詩作為框架。
但考量到部分樂府詩、古詩這類的作品,故此一併用單純「詩」的角度去作為出發點,進行評選。
另外,額外兩個獨力拉出來的獎項,分別是【最佳電腦繪畫獎】及【最佳創作金曲獎】,後續會多作說明。
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小說類
【1】凶讀 $5000
▶#20 #21 夏日湖畔(上+下) #104 夏日湖畔(番外)香氣
▶已連續三篇故事銜接的方式,引領讀者深入,不管在用字上,人物刻劃都非常的好。
▶語評
「剪不斷,理還亂,是離愁。別是一般滋味在心頭。」李煜一句思念妻子的思緒,在第一章的開局,讓人無限醞釀著,那多麼曾經的美好。494Please respect copyright.PENANAAG0UATdIuJ
接續則是父親與孩兒間,多年來已未溫存的親情。
畫面是那麼地美不勝收---494Please respect copyright.PENANAFVc8JWV8wF
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又一刻,轉折接踵而來。494Please respect copyright.PENANA0KPwqAfR4P
一陣猛咳,替換的是埋下了這段故事另一處伏筆。494Please respect copyright.PENANAnVCEAojeP0
一個故事之內容精采萬分,之所以讓人看了血脈噴張,捨不得放下,就是因為其中的不平凡。494Please respect copyright.PENANAELwMm7jj0I
而這篇在下章就是如此。494Please respect copyright.PENANAgzahqMxlXj
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林佑堂的變故,是突來的喪屍系列。494Please respect copyright.PENANAMYmtpwF2YQ
估計讀者心到此處,仍處在數度混亂之中,這便也是作者凶讀所達成的目的。494Please respect copyright.PENANAfVmatOubBI
耐人尋味的親情,卻轉折為末日的延續,更讓人有敲碗再看下去續篇的打算。494Please respect copyright.PENANAAdysdUP5mw
而在那新聞快訊後,簡潔地收尾結束,更把這篇有力的畫下句點。494Please respect copyright.PENANAekIdlS2ZRN
是否疫情將緩和停滯,這我們無從得知。494Please respect copyright.PENANAzHuewDGJ0I
但唯一明白的卻是,那份恐懼感已然存於你內心深處,餘音繞梁三日不絕。494Please respect copyright.PENANA9egq6SQBA6
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在104章的番外篇延續了,讀者再次想要的畫面,凶讀更是樂善好施地將畫面全數帶給讀者,簡直令人幸福得太過不要。494Please respect copyright.PENANAhIU48MoK5x
「我知道你們還想看對吧?那我就接續再寫下去。」那份激昂感,卻給了我們內心違和的感動。494Please respect copyright.PENANACqZNXDYhoE
還記得去年在Netflix看過殭屍校園,雖故事的起點不同,卻有類似的風格,而在中部開始傳染開來的病毒,又是否會使政府展開鎖國政策呢?494Please respect copyright.PENANArF6zW7JF4K
這又將會是另外的話題,我們便不多做討論。
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眼下,有的只剩讀者的幻想空間。
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【2】 Devor 白棘 $4000
▶#123 終末的煙火 #138 終末的海洋 #147 終末的冰箱
▶這三篇故事,可以分開閱讀獨立的章節,也可以連貫再一起成為一篇長篇。
▶語評
非常罕見的倒述寫法。494Please respect copyright.PENANAQnqXL4oVgt
在第三篇中我們才知道歐林494Please respect copyright.PENANA89P3Xx2vGY
這故是關鍵的人物494Please respect copyright.PENANAuB6hhgkFYU
自此才明白,原來他不僅僅是想要復活494Please respect copyright.PENANAIeYRFkhjiy
最強吸血鬼兼任戀人的芙蕾兒並且同時想延續那個諾言494Please respect copyright.PENANASLg6Vc4kXA
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「我們的孩子」494Please respect copyright.PENANANA3NJnN2Mv
這連續性的故事寫法特殊、故事完整494Please respect copyright.PENANAwtalUiZuMz
實為本次【第六期創挑】中非常少見的用詞精簡,劇情完整的好文。494Please respect copyright.PENANAHMFIJV0J26
而相信自芙蕾兒離開前往新的星球後494Please respect copyright.PENANAuOVW7aDkO3
也肯定還會有新的故事起點494Please respect copyright.PENANAklfYiOKHV1
然而天下無不散的宴席494Please respect copyright.PENANASQ0pmWsBDT
我們本次故事便到此結束494Please respect copyright.PENANACk55YayLfj
希望下次還能再次相遇
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【3】東加豆 $3000
▶#57 在雅典46度的邂逅
▶在眾多篇幅中,脫穎而出的是,故事僅只是讀過一次,卻能留下一種強烈的遺憾感,即便是第一次語評後,過了一年仍舊記得這篇故事。
▶語評
從引頸期盼到衝動遠行再到心灰意冷,全都只在一念轉瞬之間。494Please respect copyright.PENANAWDFAJT6Zzt
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時而濕冷刺骨,時而溫暖潤人。只有那若隱若現的鹽澀味。翻越了半個地球曲面的海風,再次又為女孩捎來了,希臘赤道的浪漫。494Please respect copyright.PENANA37Uy0eY91c
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然而,言語中就是躲藏不了的宿命。爭執,同時是不可避免的毒藥。494Please respect copyright.PENANAWB47L5cDO3
雖然亞歷山大沉默寡言,卻又可能內心同樣掀起幾絲驚滔駭浪,過猶那地中海的濱海陸風。494Please respect copyright.PENANAya7qzFVILt
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十日的短暫浪漫,在最後無言的結局中就畫下了浪漫的破碎。璇姑娘,那女孩。在22歲的希臘,不帶走任何一片雲彩。
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【4】嚮往國度 $2000
▶#122 回不去的夏天
▶語評
或許,女孩在男孩的心目中,尚未離開世間,只是去了一趟旅行。494Please respect copyright.PENANA9TZ98GZTMU
然而,她早已成為了徘徊在兩人過去記憶的地縛靈,只是男孩至今仍未知情。494Please respect copyright.PENANAsd3zzmc1wV
從首段讓讀者猜測,或許是與女孩的某項約定,卻未料想竟是場人鬼情未了。494Please respect copyright.PENANAU1UCBLL1ra
直當夏季,在眾人眼底,我仍舊是個念舊的傻瓜。494Please respect copyright.PENANAX74NojXby3
----我也會赴約前往只有我倆的地方。494Please respect copyright.PENANAF2tlftOw4g
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我嘗試幻想,如果女孩不是同學,而是男孩的親妹妹呢?494Please respect copyright.PENANAumwLZ9HV8h
會不會是父母親對他倆默許的戀兄情節呢?494Please respect copyright.PENANAIEp7pxn8TH
最後的一栗核桃果,放進的並非只是男孩的口袋,反而是讀者的腦海深處的下丘帶,是令人抑鬱不住的交感情緒。494Please respect copyright.PENANAqNH2y07Upj
房內的擺設習慣仍舊未變,然而變得是男孩儼然未知心態變化。494Please respect copyright.PENANAeU21poYIDA
直當年齡越大,約定束縛卻也越輕。只是他仍未發現而已。494Please respect copyright.PENANAZwz83ScE8P
「我還會再來此地嗎?」內心的他,或許有一天終會發現。494Please respect copyright.PENANAhK2zX6th0G
而從「想見你。」,直至餘生再也不見,那又會是怎麼樣子的感概呢?494Please respect copyright.PENANA4aUwQZQSQQ
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「體貼不該在離別,你會讓該死心的的人還有留戀。」而妳最後的溫柔,也讓那個總是跌跌撞撞的男孩,終究打破了直男的心房,如此的明示,最終他也肯定發現了這些蛛絲馬跡了吧。494Please respect copyright.PENANAfokK4vlm9o
我,還會再來嗎?每年盛夏,妳還會再此處嗎?494Please respect copyright.PENANA4kh8l0k5k4
陡然間,男孩的一抹淚痕伴隨著成長悄然滑下。
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男孩離開後山後,她對著空無一人無助地嘶喊著:「你,明年別再來了。」494Please respect copyright.PENANA3ADZB3UOoZ
儘管未來,女孩不知道是否成為了男孩心中最熟悉的陌生人。但那奈河橋上,望穿著黃泉;凝視著他仍未走完人生的女孩,直至走過彼岸花叢,喝完了孟婆湯,她仍相信來生幾世,倆人肯定還能再相見。
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【5】大三明治 $2000
▶#86 拉普拉斯的白兔
▶語評
一個無限循環的惡夢(應該算是)494Please respect copyright.PENANAKRuvoHHKro
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原先還在思索拉普拉斯的兔子的我,直到看完了故事才知道,我根本無需糾結這個地方。494Please respect copyright.PENANA0nvQdk5S4g
因為故事已經告訴我了。
文章開篇以學長為起點。494Please respect copyright.PENANAx2oaWsZdZp
而故事線轉回到了從前。494Please respect copyright.PENANAP6tGZY4fUG
自己也成了那個月曦口中的學長,令人感覺到不自覺的寒顫,而這份帶入感的恐懼,正是結尾伏筆所醞釀而出的感覺。
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【6】九指三爺 $1500
▶#23 爸爸,還要去哪裡玩?
▶語評
第一段尚未讀完,一道與父親訣別的感傷便先湧上心頭。494Please respect copyright.PENANAyFFrulTJD2
父親未竟的誓言,是兩人心中永遠的隔閡。494Please respect copyright.PENANAno7arVRSrH
為何情感總道別離時才會讓人醞釀開來?494Please respect copyright.PENANAsP2XFVcnxU
又為何說別讓遺憾留下,卻滿地皆為遺憾?494Please respect copyright.PENANAnaPYNPRj54
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告別式中,可以想見的到,父親再娶的家庭該是與自己有著違和的場面;畢竟,自己本已就不屬於另個家庭的一份子。494Please respect copyright.PENANAE4iztoIbme
然而,雙方彼此嘗試性的接納,早已打破很多舊時代時候的情緒。494Please respect copyright.PENANAyXQ3IMYzdy
這點相信生活上只要遭遇過這種際遇的人,心底怕是比起你、我都更加了解。494Please respect copyright.PENANA0666lbI23T
由愛轉恨、恨轉怨,再到冷淡。494Please respect copyright.PENANAJWs2utCtnn
這才是常態。
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父親厚繭的雙手,在威利心中是永成長時永遠的心魔。494Please respect copyright.PENANAXcF2XQkoqf
直到最後一刻,得知了父親原是愛著自己的時候,淚水又該如何能止住潸落。494Please respect copyright.PENANAq1GoJvqYI6
一代親情,未竟的諾言,終究還是謊言。494Please respect copyright.PENANAyiAqHInNZj
即便,在告別式中聽到了這些真實話語,可父親仍舊一次都回來見過自己一面,又何如?494Please respect copyright.PENANA0URWTM5Olf
一句「父親,接著去哪玩......?」沉重般的自喃,更多的卻是解放開對自己的束縛,並非是對父親救贖。
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告別式後,這些人或許餘生不見。494Please respect copyright.PENANA33HHPMmQ6B
然而,此等心情又豈是說忘就忘。494Please respect copyright.PENANAZdt2xw0hhb
原來,痛便是忘了怎麼把過去給忘掉。
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這個盛夏,剩下遺憾。
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【7】思凡 $1500
▶#94 贈我予年
▶語評
故事的結尾是有著強烈的後勁的。494Please respect copyright.PENANAdAqRLyc3hZ
整篇閱讀後,在開頭以宋予年在百忙之中,突然發覺了「她」的名字,突然之間再次走入了自己的人生。494Please respect copyright.PENANAmDOQbouO45
至此,幾年前分別以後。494Please respect copyright.PENANA6OEPBM4InR
情感又悄悄地、毫無預警的映入了生命之中。494Please respect copyright.PENANAVRJ4b1O2f5
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「贈我,予年。」或許標題應當可以分開兩字來讀。494Please respect copyright.PENANA47xgkBJEwL
文中沒有提及到女孩當初為何離開了,然而,接續著故事推敲,讓我們得知。494Please respect copyright.PENANA81AugbeR21
也是是疾病纏身。494Please respect copyright.PENANAwjXmAzkgKS
也迫不得已,離開了他。494Please respect copyright.PENANAR4a6Sk2mHU
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贈我,是一個約定。494Please respect copyright.PENANAxUiAkM5KUb
一個約定券的約定。 494Please respect copyright.PENANA8hJbJnRIiF
而再見之時,人事已非。494Please respect copyright.PENANAiqUc5Ur5bb
那個我已經不再是原本的那個我,但你還會深愛著我嗎?494Please respect copyright.PENANAYWQwA2ZNrF
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此刻,盛夏煙花燦爛,卻不如妳。494Please respect copyright.PENANAmsCQMdbUCK
或許,再見不遠。 494Please respect copyright.PENANA8Zlnrexcbx
讓就那緣起三生起,三生滅吧。
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【8】青蒼 Cyanblue $1500
▶#47 青夏,十七歲
▶語評
如同青澀地稚嫩十八未滿。那愛戀都如此單純與小心翼翼。
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女方刻意放緩的進度向前,歷經長達三年感情滋養,在學年畢業的最後一刻,差點翻船的心情更是令人跟隨帶入那份苦澀。494Please respect copyright.PENANA0CzkRHGeQc
就像青春微酸甜那般。494Please respect copyright.PENANApxfysFljZ3
忌妒、單戀,都是青春代表物。494Please respect copyright.PENANABGTbxoTRo8
林夏芮不按照牌理出牌的外向性格,羅青澤在最後眼淚落下那刻才敲響了內心的鐘鳴,迴盪在內心心頭。494Please respect copyright.PENANAtPsebe194n
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「原來這就是喜歡的心思。」我們不能怪男生呆如愚木,畢竟又有多少人能在高中時期對於未來、對於愛情掌握的滿分修行呢?494Please respect copyright.PENANAkezUpHhzzn
夏天的故事,炙熱卻又充滿了愛戀的渲染。比擬冬日,我們更加容易觸動是主動的熱情。494Please respect copyright.PENANAzp9UvYYjrB
劉子傑的主動,或許在我們眼底,更像是跳樑小丑那般故作醜態。494Please respect copyright.PENANAMq2f4jjTHl
但就現實面來說,如果今天劉子傑與羅青澤兩人都具備同等的帥氣,同等的條件,那麼主動宣示的那方勝率還是會更高。494Please respect copyright.PENANACvGO2v8x9u
或許,歷經過這次的告白失敗,在未來能成為他愛情的一個學分也猶未可知。494Please respect copyright.PENANAjJ5PzuLCed
反而寫成了另一個故事的主角。494Please respect copyright.PENANAc5DEmRbhFe
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「人間的確荒謬,可我們還是能在這個人間拾溫柔。」故事曖昧的兩小無猜終成一對眷侶,而畢業後、就業後,又是否能續緣,我們無法猜測最後結局。494Please respect copyright.PENANAKXoEjBgf5H
心動往往只是一剎那,喜歡卻是一輩子的記憶。494Please respect copyright.PENANA2gsPYh8SXI
如果有一天,我們也面臨那份剎那的怦然心動,你/妳又是否敢勇於這份悸動,邁向這份回應呢?494Please respect copyright.PENANA5mQQQP53pC
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夏天,依舊是夏天。但不一樣是我們的內心。
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【9】墨云 $1500
▶#28 盛夏與魔女
▶語評
這是我見過最鮮蝦的奇幻劇情了。494Please respect copyright.PENANAoV5kAHVyU7
尤其這男人,絕對是個狠人,全部的純情只為了鋪敘結尾的那慾望。
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開門見山的斗大魔女標題,早已告訴了這不能用平常的校園看待故事。494Please respect copyright.PENANAfrwIt36TqR
而更為新奇的是簡單的一個小手段就處理好了,蟬靈的糾結,這同時打破了我對魔女的刻板印象。494Please respect copyright.PENANAMq1dbZUw8L
魔女的天然呆更是突如其來一筆。494Please respect copyright.PENANAwhNcgtYAXW
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最後,故事的結尾再次迎來一次,天外飛來兩筆的性慾交易,這確實打破了讀者對於故事原先的美好幻想。494Please respect copyright.PENANAa6OTXRpM1U
只得獲得一次白眼與冰冷感。
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【10】罪夜 $1500
▶#169 戀愛炸彈
▶語評
藉由肉體爆炸的引爆點劃開了對於戀愛的追求,是那樣獨特卻又邪門。494Please respect copyright.PENANAejgAoPFPQb
494Please respect copyright.PENANAmRcUBdCpAj
百鬼夜行獨見妳。千里迷離卻是妳。494Please respect copyright.PENANAlHdusKF22s
我喜愛著,這般怪異卻令人心動的瞬間。494Please respect copyright.PENANA0WpYhTrodT
因那悸動。494Please respect copyright.PENANAKNFju19927
往往竟是那瞬間。
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即便長大後再交往的女排球隊長,仍舊不行。494Please respect copyright.PENANArFXCrWuRk2
式風透過了那次的爆炸,早已在尋響內心埋下了一顆揮之不去的種子。494Please respect copyright.PENANAW5iZRQxEry
真愛,不僅是人與人之間的感情,更是當你真心喜愛某事、某物,而願意竭盡心力的付出,使他變得更好、更幸福。494Please respect copyright.PENANA1gPEfq0FBX
那麼讓自己爆炸,也算是一種真愛嗎?494Please respect copyright.PENANAW6S3DhWTQQ
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語畢,尋響的爆炸是否讓兩人在另一個百鬼的世界相守相繫,這個猶未可知。494Please respect copyright.PENANAyDu15Hw371
但至少可以確定的是,他卻早已觸動了內心最深處的那個戀愛因子了。494Please respect copyright.PENANAQRF900lofL
「我感到心滿意足。」然而他滿意的就是真的是自己也喜愛著對方,又抑或是對方仍舊七年來愛著自己呢?
494Please respect copyright.PENANAM0MRnuTFX0
【11】 舉一千從 $1000
▶#182 〈澐寨舞〉
▶語評(詳留言)
494Please respect copyright.PENANAHdy6wjDCLt
【12】 莫軒 $1000
▶#239 末世終結之後,我在破曉的晨曦窺見夏日的生機,但故人不再
▶語評(詳留言)
494Please respect copyright.PENANACPNqmlp9vq
【13】 逆流而上 $1000
▶#185+189+192 蘇拉與山竹
▶語評(詳留言)
494Please respect copyright.PENANA8NHfFQaNhs
【14】指尖之間 $1000
▶#119 回憶剩夏,不增減的約定
▶語評(詳留言)
494Please respect copyright.PENANAfWeu53k5Qn
【15】Mag Kan $1000
▶#231 那年盛夏,我們沒有約定
▶語評(詳留言)
494Please respect copyright.PENANAKc1qcY2ETs
【16】沙發王的故事 $1000
▶#24 我們約定好了喔?
▶語評(詳留言)
494Please respect copyright.PENANAxaGKG6jrzP
【17】八十公里路 $1000
▶#10 我的心裡,還有夏天嗎
▶語評(詳留言)
494Please respect copyright.PENANAXws873LsQn
【18】 不寫文的紜啊 $1000
▶#43 《失約》
▶語評(詳留言)
494Please respect copyright.PENANAynV3e21kf4
【19】 夜臨 $1000
▶#49 天使大人的玻璃傘
▶語評(詳留言)
494Please respect copyright.PENANA0F1v6e5bXV
【20】笑耶 $1000
▶#214+216+218 故地重遊(上+中+下)
▶語評(詳留言)
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【佳作1】莫軒 $500
▶#77 我如何把你比作夏天?
【佳作2】But $500
▶#150 夏天!當然是暑假到處玩啦
【佳作3】供過佛的多多綠 $500
▶#67 那年盛夏
【佳作4】旭音愁渺 $500
▶#198 一起做餅乾
【佳作5】癲客道人 $500
▶#136 日間顯影
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【複評未上榜】
▶#6 盛夏之夢 ▶#50 滿天星 ▶#146 夏戀 ▶#238 夏雨滂沱
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新詩類
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【1】西帆 $4000
▶#203 夏•冬眠
▶語評
本作於擬人、擬物手法上十分精巧494Please respect copyright.PENANALNU6i6gXSZ
重複運用卻又沒有多餘的氛圍494Please respect copyright.PENANAGMy39UsbRr
而藉由水果方式提升(味覺)494Please respect copyright.PENANAsW53NDMz9z
我想更是使閱讀來能有另一種味道,而不止是品詩這麼簡單494Please respect copyright.PENANAJvFTb3AzmH
而是是人在食用時能入口即化494Please respect copyright.PENANAJ7vol9omXx
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「嘗試把心臟調慢」494Please respect copyright.PENANAYnTaTzx6gN
我尤以喜歡這句,心臟當然不會跳動變慢,但內心(精神)的感覺卻可以,慢而持久494Please respect copyright.PENANANoCXv5kSns
使人不會因為時間的洪流494Please respect copyright.PENANAH6TjwghHfS
失去了炙熱494Please respect copyright.PENANAV6A3DyVitg
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494Please respect copyright.PENANAFFgKzIUHAR
詩名為《夏,冬眠》494Please respect copyright.PENANAeS4pLyOz1l
但夏季怎麼會有雪494Please respect copyright.PENANAJqPCymOQi8
令人加以反思494Please respect copyright.PENANAE7bh2IURMx
雪季不該有的畫面494Please respect copyright.PENANA0ss822jDWm
卻如那噠噠的馬蹄聲,走過歲月的容顏494Please respect copyright.PENANAgHgg7zRBXw
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或許494Please respect copyright.PENANA1T45DuLna9
不只這個夏季呼吸充滿著冰凍的雪氣494Please respect copyright.PENANAqZzFPpgYU2
即便是來年494Please respect copyright.PENANAI82O30U3Lo
之後的每一年都依然如此
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【2】 Nølav 挪拉夫 $3000
▶#102 戀夏
▶語評
情有幾分、愛有幾分,情愛一生只不過是貪戀癡嗔。494Please respect copyright.PENANAwUahZr5IIL
如那鄭少秋歌詞裡的悲傷優柔,我仍沐浴在這片刻的悸夏蕩漾之間,正如首段那句夜星彌留著如你的容顏,這會令人更加拌佐孤寂的味道,與憶起漸行漸遠的那伊人。494Please respect copyright.PENANAyRWj4Yzw5b
494Please respect copyright.PENANANuLFyhGuRs
我打江南走過,卻仍等候的是你季節裡的容顏如島國般夏風。494Please respect copyright.PENANAKfgBgzropn
猶如鹹濕海風,亦如她漆黑雙眸之間是否仍容下有你的一隅。494Please respect copyright.PENANA0yEUE7idvB
又如我吱吱的淺吻聲是美麗的衝動。494Please respect copyright.PENANAMqR0LPhlhC
我不是歸人,是個過客。夏季仍舊是夏季。494Please respect copyright.PENANAIdqOwFgpiV
494Please respect copyright.PENANAyJ3AF7MAnk
景物依然,妳卻不然。494Please respect copyright.PENANAa8MTLYNJUz
多年已逝,歲月靜好不在。494Please respect copyright.PENANAZi2DA3dtrL
更多的是此刻的情殤。494Please respect copyright.PENANAVHn7l1h2zv
494Please respect copyright.PENANA9aTbJyLU2f
而長生殿上楊玉環,幽怨了千年至今仍迴盪那長恨歌。494Please respect copyright.PENANAkFDNpcZxf0
又是否譬如我此時的心思呢?494Please respect copyright.PENANAiWdhGg1u1x
春霧與東嶺再臨我又是否安然平靜呢?494Please respect copyright.PENANAQewm7bnJyw
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夏季,這絢麗。494Please respect copyright.PENANAVg1pHydndb
如曇花一現的煙花。494Please respect copyright.PENANAsztaPLB9kW
就讓今夜重燃內心那苗火吧!
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【3】霧散、秋殘 $2000
▶#12 夏
▶語評
詩詞中區分為序、插、終。494Please respect copyright.PENANAUfLSOEnjs0
同如起、轉、合三處意境。494Please respect copyright.PENANAfTRMhsqCGo
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以古詩破題,新詩釋義自己情意。494Please respect copyright.PENANANnKo3YIXCW
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六月、七月的芒夏荷香四溢,令人心曠神怡流連忘返。494Please respect copyright.PENANAcJalJP1hTN
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卻不知這竟是否為大夢誰先覺,夢醒一場空呢?
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【4】宅米蟲子 $1500
▶#157 殘夏中秋(樂府詩)
▶語評
三生三世皆躲不過命運的輪迴494Please respect copyright.PENANASN7WAjk4VA
夢裡百花卻也沒妳的笑顏盛開494Please respect copyright.PENANASt08k606cE
494Please respect copyright.PENANA4cn8BcRLjl
細雨紛飛絕情綿綿494Please respect copyright.PENANAyX9Fc8WJO2
句中江畔相隨494Please respect copyright.PENANA3vgxKnGdzS
卻又未知天意是何在494Please respect copyright.PENANAQtZv3o3f1a
494Please respect copyright.PENANACFzhUol6pt
即便是狂嘯 悲歌494Please respect copyright.PENANAViaiKwfbEZ
天上繁星 銀河494Please respect copyright.PENANAi3R3dkesUh
也僅是萬千世界的一粟494Please respect copyright.PENANADinrH5qWg9
卻找不出能取掉你的其一494Please respect copyright.PENANAV4IqSmUIH6
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從回到閣樓494Please respect copyright.PENANAJeYqjz3nMV
又再次漫步獨醉494Please respect copyright.PENANAA7zGW3W4LS
是心裡的牽掛令人陶醉494Please respect copyright.PENANAAO0UnwItvf
還是物理的酒精使人沉醉494Please respect copyright.PENANAcLCnHx5uHY
早已在你染塵衣袖分不清了494Please respect copyright.PENANAarFkM8FXoD
494Please respect copyright.PENANAk4NMToSmjP
黃泉彼岸花開,所引出的火照之路494Please respect copyright.PENANAR9hJrkFWXw
也不過只是再次三世494Please respect copyright.PENANACLS1qHp6LX
與妳再相逢的一場作戲罷了
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【5】 艾米莉 $1500
▶#3 仲夏夢華
▶語評
《仲夏夜之夢》A Midsummer Night's Dream源自於文藝復興文豪莎士比亞創作的浪漫喜劇。494Please respect copyright.PENANAyJjXvYO3xp
「仲夏夜」指的是一年之中白晝最長的夏至前後,相傳這一天晚上是精靈活躍的時刻,會有許多不可思議的奇幻事情發生。494Please respect copyright.PENANAYYXPOG8bOR
在PENANA的賴群組中求教 #闇夜星河 #星秤 兩位,得知原是精靈的惡作劇進而造成了這場愛恨糾葛的多角關係。494Please respect copyright.PENANACKBL2ynvUx
(感謝科普。)494Please respect copyright.PENANA7iG8zd4EBJ
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然而在十多年前求學階段,魚魚第一次聽到仲夏夜這個詞,並不在西洋古典所見到,反而是在《xxxholic》、《TSUBASA翼》這部早期神作中看到一詞;接續再次聽到是在我大學選修一堂《神話英語》的課程再次聽到。494Please respect copyright.PENANAplCKW6Iqzz
在高中時期,熱愛小說、動漫、電玩的我,這些是我課後逐漸成為作家(廢人)的養分來源,這些過往我們就暫且不再說明。494Please respect copyright.PENANAd5kAsYDcX9
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AMYS大的新詩中,可以從簡樸日常的景物,如枝頭樹影、街道行人、沙灘繁星再到湖滔漣漪等,想像的到,這對戀人從初視、打傘、相依直至心底的共鳴。494Please respect copyright.PENANAZ2NidDvvQu
簡單的美好,竟可以這般簡單。494Please respect copyright.PENANAr7HY9uFkqA
如梁靜茹<為我好>專輯內,像剝橘子這般簡單的幸福,可以唾手可得的滿足,也或許對某些人來說非常的困難。這些取決在於人的內心想法。494Please respect copyright.PENANAyQ7HzlCrDZ
494Please respect copyright.PENANApkMedstgwp
仲夏之間少了點的是激情。494Please respect copyright.PENANA53WKh8mAel
仲夏之間多出些的是清淡。494Please respect copyright.PENANAqZQ3dor0cp
檯面下的暗流湧動,或許僅只是讀者所看不到的他們內心的洶湧。494Please respect copyright.PENANAgtSkAMEE5j
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而我只知,仲夏夢宴正演奏著一道清新的情愛。
494Please respect copyright.PENANAgN1jlFLyjH
【6】紫小絢 $1000
▶#51 花夢之無聲
▶語評
無語的花瓣,自小嚮往著自由綻放的藍天白雲,夏蟬與飛鳥的佐伴。曾經多麼遙想著那份追逐的渴望。
494Please respect copyright.PENANAMWbHgFDERh
與其說是羨慕,倒是幾分憤世嫉俗的意味所在。494Please respect copyright.PENANAoHhv68jeZ1
494Please respect copyright.PENANAwZWV896bzd
直至,雨過天青,才發覺原來自己仍舊擁有著雨滴的相擁。494Please respect copyright.PENANAMBZSN82wps
而我們又何必在意那天空藍呢?
494Please respect copyright.PENANAEz8WAGzuCB
【7】宅米蟲子 $1000
▶#78 兩世笙花
▶語評
五月成熟的梅樹,透過初夏將其青梅韻開酒香該是多麼令人陶醉的畫面,而再多上幾株該採下的花枝,豈不樂乎?494Please respect copyright.PENANAnbTkOfMYAG
494Please respect copyright.PENANAe7WBoTVKmH
一抹玄龍劃破了淡薄的心防。494Please respect copyright.PENANAxOXegGjJYk
美景再好都無法平息,我倆的已然造成的誤解。494Please respect copyright.PENANAbnX4vjDeTj
白華如是一道流星墜落,墜落於重生與你的羈絆。494Please respect copyright.PENANAf0hvowa0uo
494Please respect copyright.PENANAUUGGWxaLHM
而在反覆讀完了宅米蟲子<兩世笙花>後,想起了兩世輪迴的仙履奇緣,其中經典的一段台詞:「曾經有一段真摯的愛情在我面前,但我沒有去珍惜,直到失去了以後才後悔莫及,塵世間最痛苦的莫過於此......」494Please respect copyright.PENANA5g3ffsDMPw
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造物弄人,倆世為人而今生卻與你交杯喝上壺合丞酒,可為多少輩子所修來的福分。494Please respect copyright.PENANAHcgW2xwF59
494Please respect copyright.PENANAPgF9q0QxH9
前世,已放下。494Please respect copyright.PENANAzxs5BFQLie
今來,是泛起了一水漣漪。494Please respect copyright.PENANAVyK9gWCvgG
494Please respect copyright.PENANAdShcR8T7UP
如不是身分所牽絆,我便放棄了所有與你共赴天崖海角。
494Please respect copyright.PENANAAATCK6MGn9
【8】Nicolea $1000
▶#121 夏
▶語評
夏季田園的美好景色,映襯著一片祥和的欣欣向榮。494Please respect copyright.PENANA64R5Ow6StG
如同中學時期讀過了一首宋代曾做《頌》詩:494Please respect copyright.PENANAi7qaooo6qR
「春有百花秋有月,夏有涼風冬有雪。若無閒事掛心頭,便是人間好時節。」494Please respect copyright.PENANAE1a48vLjXk
494Please respect copyright.PENANAkmFJRcLHfQ
而這份難得的清幽,確實隨著年齡的增長。494Please respect copyright.PENANAZNZoqk7gJr
越是得來不易。494Please respect copyright.PENANArNvG2HMKtu
494Please respect copyright.PENANA9YZzOAL1LN
田中牧童的玉笛繚繞著蟬聲裊裊。494Please respect copyright.PENANA967y2qazkl
這該是人生如何的片刻煙花璀璨。494Please respect copyright.PENANAPXbwfwCWtw
只得盼望,人生還能再得這般閒情逸致。
494Please respect copyright.PENANAKU3M1uesTI
【9】胡殷 $1000
▶#137 鳳凰花
▶語評
夏季雖為離別時節,卻也是人生成長的必經道路。494Please respect copyright.PENANAejZeHVUNvX
眼淚是曖昧的催化劑,也是愛情的火藥。494Please respect copyright.PENANA7mWJ2lUMXP
人走茶未涼卻為下一次再相遇時而香。494Please respect copyright.PENANA3jJBWJ8bGl
如我們未盡的緣分這般。494Please respect copyright.PENANAUvPLNCpRhd
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相親相見知何日,此時此夜難為情。494Please respect copyright.PENANAFe2sL7Hhha
而我卻因這片花落,這道蟬聲所困惑。494Please respect copyright.PENANAj6nIR2IdtV
即便歷經了離別後夏風的迎撫,也無法抽離曾經的嬉戲。494Please respect copyright.PENANADvkF0VhEY1
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妳與我是否曾有探險過那道友誼塹壁後的道路。494Please respect copyright.PENANAuZXe8sQnpK
我並不知情。494Please respect copyright.PENANA2bzvUojDuq
也不再無從得知。494Please respect copyright.PENANAyR5X6ii7iJ
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494Please respect copyright.PENANAkacsqkP0iV
「隻身回望太匆匆,此生多少情與仇。494Please respect copyright.PENANAAPYdKNPlMc
無邊絲雨細如愁,朝來寒雨幾回眸。」494Please respect copyright.PENANAjTyeokhFTs
只得對空一嘆,老天給予了我們太短的夢醒時分。494Please respect copyright.PENANA9FOrJV9pHe
此刻,我只擁著憶起最後鳳凰花下,妳牽起我的悸動,約定未忘的誓言罷了。494Please respect copyright.PENANAnpQRjNRACP
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未來,我們還會有機會再見嗎?來世,我們還會續緣嗎?還是,我只個過客?
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【10】林賾流 $1000
▶#83 烈陽之影
▶語評
開篇以豔陽不可直視494Please respect copyright.PENANAX3tYkpdP8r
寫出了真實的太陽給予人的強盛494Please respect copyright.PENANA9apdoSKjEC
並以柔和手法,側寫隨著時間經過,很快又能再見到的期待494Please respect copyright.PENANACVYBjyPVP3
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而在萬里無雲的日常494Please respect copyright.PENANAwX4uxxvUoC
大地照耀出了你的光芒494Please respect copyright.PENANAiYC9xs0DsN
只想著短暫沒有你的存在494Please respect copyright.PENANABjdIU9GPlL
與緬懷影子的並行494Please respect copyright.PENANAgbTezPDVdL
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而東升初陽如一雙碩壯的大手494Please respect copyright.PENANAF1BfrfzBdR
敲響了人群一日的序幕494Please respect copyright.PENANApPZwgMk3Zs
島與海494Please respect copyright.PENANAo9kjGHNf1r
又為何區分你、我呢494Please respect copyright.PENANABXpcBVKo3s
如同我仰望著巍峨的山峰山鋒也正仰望著你494Please respect copyright.PENANAPKsfrWcMEA
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隨著四季的變化494Please respect copyright.PENANA1obhtq1UdB
夏季卻是此刻我影跡糾纏最久時494Please respect copyright.PENANAJYAmvx7BGl
直至,我忘卻了
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那個我
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【佳作1】 宅米蟲子 $1000
▶#170 夏祈杳杳
▶語評
本篇相對於前兩篇樂府詩494Please respect copyright.PENANAUxrL2TVDc7
詩意要較為薄弱494Please respect copyright.PENANASe4qKUCuwf
但仍是一首很棒的古詩
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之所以我認為相對較弱的部分494Please respect copyright.PENANA2M0jFjomf2
是其意境 與用詞的閱讀感494Please respect copyright.PENANAB8WNkS4X7t
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【兩世笙花】、【殘夏中秋】中皆有一個顯眼的主題,但在【夏祈杳杳】中以花鋪景,望卻天上星闕流露出了一絲孤寂與深沉的感受。494Please respect copyright.PENANAzPFMux5l61
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或許是【兩世笙花】的一抹玄龍劃破淡薄心防,思念太深。494Please respect copyright.PENANAnpJ3xxcRWJ
也許是【殘夏中秋】的細雨紛飛絕情綿綿,景色太美。494Please respect copyright.PENANAxYmV7artty
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再嗑完了兩份深沉的憂愁後,重回到了【夏祈杳杳】,別有另外一種,希望來年梧桐花開,伊人會再來的期望。494Please respect copyright.PENANAFCDz1duaWp
更多是抱持著,能夠等待,並且那人是可以等得到的感受。494Please respect copyright.PENANAmsMzDJkfp0
故此,以其作為比較下,兩者意境高低立判。494Please respect copyright.PENANAVCAamksOY1
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當然,宅米的詩無庸置疑放在蕉園上都是罕有敵手,皆為佳作。494Please respect copyright.PENANAXIO5NrYcVI
詩的優缺,僅憑讀者當下的心境去解讀。494Please respect copyright.PENANAWZiaky2Cxz
每個人的角度皆為不同。494Please respect copyright.PENANAP6XBuOjifM
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有人感受深刻,494Please respect copyright.PENANAk36ZMtXofF
有人無感,494Please respect copyright.PENANAn3qHc2Xzug
各有差異。494Please respect copyright.PENANAmmyr9e35UC
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而我僅是那茫茫人海中,494Please respect copyright.PENANA4nRfsA03Ff
因其而感受到詩中情摯所渲染一名騷客。
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【佳作2】柏木桐柊 $1000
▶#58 也許我還會夢見你
▶語評
或許,她的影跡已成過往。窗櫺映入柔情似水,而匯聚成今夜的輾轉難眠。494Please respect copyright.PENANAJ8oJ4arKdp
我望不及妳眼底的星空漫步,而夏季裡還仍猶存妳餘溫。妳說的那些在我的世界又算得是什麼,留下的不過是在保險櫃裡的一抹笑意。我早已分不清,夏日我倆是否曾約定過,而捧上手中代表著祝福的黃玫瑰。494Please respect copyright.PENANAUDf8IXW9Hd
這不代表著我倆有過曾經。夏夜裡。獨自釀著夢中還偶然遇見的妳。494Please respect copyright.PENANAH5r0m98SUC
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柏木桐柊文筆能力在短短數筆之下,運用了大量的暗喻及景色來比擬離情的傷感。醪、櫺兩字都是極其罕見的同義字,在詩句之間也靈活運用自己的特色
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【佳作3】 余軍 $1000
▶#139 七夕夜茫茫
▶語評
銀燭秋光冷畫屏,輕羅小扇撲流螢。494Please respect copyright.PENANA4RD0nRque0
天階夜色涼如水,臥看牽牛織女星。494Please respect copyright.PENANA1PHfih7mqK
即便過了一千兩百年,我們仍可想見在宮中拿著圓扇揮舞著螢火蟲的宮女,是幾般哀愁著,在涼意襲人的季夏中,孤獨賞月。494Please respect copyright.PENANAATBTt8VeFh
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每每七夕時分總是容易遭受羨煞旁人的眷侶炸眼球。494Please respect copyright.PENANAZZb4G3LH2U
而這對於此刻孤寂的人,將變得更加孤寂萬分。494Please respect copyright.PENANAM1RiEljz8s
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也許,他仍等待著茫茫人中那個她。494Please respect copyright.PENANAIr1XgK64Xh
也許,他只不過是她生命中的過客。494Please respect copyright.PENANAbDJKp1cihM
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偷偷遙望著,她的限時動態。494Please respect copyright.PENANA7nJ77BfXUD
悄悄祝福著,她的喜訊分享。494Please respect copyright.PENANAsPeyzkdntP
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七夕。494Please respect copyright.PENANAbferhS4q4y
是個情感放大百倍的敏感時節。494Please respect copyright.PENANAqX6dlxKILp
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在銀河伴隨著夜幕,總是能不經意地想起了某個她。494Please respect copyright.PENANAPNBMFfmEBH
或許,這才是那年盛夏,最難忘的約定了吧。
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【佳作4】虛冲 $1000
▶#228 仲夏夜之詩
▶語評
道長這首寫實敘事的打油詩494Please respect copyright.PENANAAfLX4T57lP
用道地口吻方式呈現494Please respect copyright.PENANA6tALf985bP
別有一番令人感同身受的味道494Please respect copyright.PENANAn0CQiNa1wg
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華麗的新詩固然有深沈494Please respect copyright.PENANAKdLDX7jvXA
反覆咀嚼的口感494Please respect copyright.PENANAB9jzGYoOWS
但相較於打油詩494Please respect copyright.PENANAYmpo2GK3aA
卻更能反映生活上的記趣494Please respect copyright.PENANAStoyinth4f
又或者應該說是上班藍領族的無奈吧!494Please respect copyright.PENANArWriIJdoGV
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夏季沉悶、炙熱494Please respect copyright.PENANAxZxFbi0IaA
而很難讓人能對於煩躁事情494Please respect copyright.PENANAiFCpuRdpg9
保持理性與忍耐494Please respect copyright.PENANAbnVm3esczA
故此,我們應該適時調整自己步伐
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抬起頭來494Please respect copyright.PENANAvbdaBfVrdX
深深吸一口氣494Please respect copyright.PENANAyPVODxrrsc
靜下來看一下周遭的事物494Please respect copyright.PENANAzF75L3fgji
仍舊有著許多美好的細節
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【佳作5】胤宸 $1000
▶#53 那時風若來
▶語評
花自飄零水自流。494Please respect copyright.PENANAlHa3YN4XT1
一種相思,兩處閒愁。494Please respect copyright.PENANAIOzeZt922L
此情無計可消除,才下眉頭,卻上心頭。494Please respect copyright.PENANALonbnBdOF2
同如<<李清照>>的一剪梅,而這西湖庭院盈滿的荷風又與易安居士筆下那殘荷,抽象暨不易捉摸的思想感情相較,誰更勝一籌呢?494Please respect copyright.PENANAVFV8XaNHsj
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獨賞荷葉,飄蕩於塘邊,一抹光照滑過一池漣漪。494Please respect copyright.PENANAT1o0N00tfP
卻無心這番閒情逸致,內心仍未那尚未赴約的風而風,掛記了心頭,酒、荷、影皆為而動,卻因那三缺一的風美中不足。494Please respect copyright.PENANAV2giy6toBY
慧開禪師那經典一句「春有百花秋有月,夏有涼風冬有雪,若無閒事掛心頭,便是人間好時節。」 494Please respect copyright.PENANASMaLAbMUck
而其中「若無閒事在心頭」更是把心中沒有掛慮,便是好時節詮釋的淋漓盡致。494Please respect copyright.PENANAJu77UkRDGE
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人生在世,總為數不清的事情苦惱、煩躁,如果可真心放下了這些東西,簡直美麗得太過不要了。494Please respect copyright.PENANAyi2LmwFO6e
風,是否能在夏日再次吹拂。494Please respect copyright.PENANAl5TReCVcC8
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我們仍未可知。494Please respect copyright.PENANAvUQnmTckbu
但卻明白另一事,眼前這番美酒,如果可以那便今朝有酒今朝醉吧。
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【複評未上榜】
▶#55 薰夏誓約,詩綺永存 ▶#176 逃夏 ▶#194 致逝去的夏
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特殊獎項
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【最佳電腦繪畫獎】LiCh 阿立 $3000
▶#195 Sunny Come Back
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【最佳創作金曲獎】W.H. $3000
▶#212 夏之熱力學
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感謝贊助本場創作挑戰的各路金主
Penana小熊 15500P!!!!!!
伍拾陸 5600P!!
月亮熊 5000P!!
夏坂Moonight 5000P!!
InDeeeer 4000P!!
容霜 3000P!
谷映塵(員外) 2000P!
W.H. 2000P!
笑具 1500P!
知閒言炎 1000P!
筆墨談兵 1000P!
Sandy 1000P!
悲艾 1000P!
月月 800P!
宅米蟲子 起源 Nicolea 葉月晉久HS 墨云 巫尚益 100-200P
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本期創挑心得
(1)是的,由於這個評比斷斷續續,歷經了接近一年的時間,在時效性上早已失去了觀眾的熱誠,途中發現有些人已經退出PENANA。
其中我感到最惋惜的是夏坂Moonight老師,他在本期的3篇作品都是上乘的好文,由於我的拖延症,讓大家失去了能讀上更好作品的機會。
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(2)排名評比,是我的閱讀程度與個人感觀去排序,或許,你會覺得為何他的作品比我好呢?
這邊,我歡迎大家都能提出討論。
不希望反而因為排名,引發筆戰,那就失去了開心創作本身的意義了。
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(3)本期在#195樓LiCh 阿立大大的「Sunny Come Back」,是我開始創作挑戰以來,收到最大得驚喜了,我萬萬想不到竟然會有這麼精彩的投稿,讓我當下受寵若驚,太幸福了吧。
各位,如果喜歡歡迎到LICH大的粉絲專頁,拜讀他的作品。
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(4)分數上,本次我並沒有參用到「閱讀數」或是「喜歡數」這個數據,因為我怕會對於文筆上的排名失準,不過我還是先將我初評、複評的經過都貼上來給各位看看。
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(5)好啦,廢話有點多。
這邊希望大家都能去我得其他幾個創作挑戰看看。
如果你們喜歡的話,都幫我書籤起來吧!
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另外
已經開始,各位準備磨拳擦掌吧!!!!!!!!
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如果可以幫我打賞本篇(會當作下期獎金)
為下期創挑添上一份心力XD
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謝謝~494Please respect copyright.PENANA74sqzZLc7a